Crippling Darkness

A summer night in an autumn's room
My fingers shaking, my heart's constant boom

My eyes are closed but i'm not asleep
The fan on high is the only faint squeak

Repetition makes a fool out of me
(Change the game to live happily)

Prayer offered fervently upon shaking knees
The shadows descend from outside trees

Hypocrisy, shame: the names of my game
My misery, my reality needs no such fame

Repitition makes a fool out of me
(I'm changing the game, so I can see)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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March 3, 2014 at 6:48 PM
Hi Juli, I came to this poem because it's couplet, being generally a couplet writer myself thus I'm attracted to them. I see this as opening the heart and eyes to a brighter future, very well written. I'd like to thank you for the placement in your last contest, much appreciated. Take care, Richard
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October 12, 2013 at 12:45 PM
A heart felt piece. Well done.
Williams Avatar
October 12, 2013 at 1:49 AM
Juli-Michelle you express the feeling of inner fear and apprehension so well in these lines, very well written...David
Hill Avatar
October 10, 2013 at 1:07 PM
filled with great lines. The first one is excellent...TAH
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October 9, 2013 at 3:18 PM
A poignant write, kudos.. Ken
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October 8, 2013 at 8:41 PM
This is very deep, Julie........ enjoyed :) LOVE ~SKAT~
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October 8, 2013 at 8:03 AM
deep reflection that makes me wonder at your fine sensibilities, juli.. i had internet problems and only found out i placed in your contest... i am so honored, thank you humbly!..:) huggs
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October 7, 2013 at 9:41 PM
What an expression on the inner thoughts, Juli
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