Sigrid Ermine Poet Rhyme

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Long wanders across hills
Expiring - Three of my steps were one of my Dad's 
Halting will

Refuelling near
Banks brandished fennell freely had 
Revered

Herb young
Stung by green glad 
Tongue

Washed down with water swills
Sweaty bunch became invalid
Flung



29th July 2020
Minichu an Innocent Childhood Memory 
Mohan Chutani

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Mohan Chutani August 31, 2020 at 9:50 AM Sigrid, thanx for participating in my contest though you may have thought it to be a torture as commented by you below. But you will agree, we got so many lovely entries. Technically, you got it fine. Wishing you best and congrats for your placement. Mohan Sigrid Ermine August 31, 2020 at 2:10 PM ... Just realised that my lines are each different, which doesn't seem to be the format practiced. Sigrid Ermine August 31, 2020 at 1:55 PM !! Thanks so much, Mohan!! I respect your form, and comments are transparent, I know. Also commented that Ghazal is not for me, too repetitive. Thank you for hosting it, because all practice helps me learn.

Kai Michael Neumann August 16, 2020 at 7:59 AM Beautiful ...

Caren Krutsinger August 2, 2020 at 8:05 PM This is incredibly interesting. I am perplexed by one part of it because I think I know, but maybe I do not know. "three of my steps were one of my dad's". This is intriguing! Sigrid Ermine August 2, 2020 at 11:03 PM Nothing mysterious, I'm afraid. Just I was a little 'un. This minichu form was torture! Tight syllables and rhyme. Who thinks this form is fun!!??