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Countdown - Collaboration With Chris Green

Words he formed.
  Shells, pebbles, sorted by color
    Straight grey lines
      Curved watery blue
        Rosy dots
          Sand dollar phrases
                    drifting, floating, resting on the shore
                  Gathered decorative patterns
               garland and seaweed
      Expressed feelings
       hand dug gully around
        his small world filled with
         salty water
                     And he lay down
                   safely on his island
                 Awaiting the surf, the tide,
               pure white ripples of hope
             to wash away the pain
Words he formed
   with his fingers
      folding air around
         simmering sun
            finally realizing
               his thoughts had meaning
                  as nary a cloudy day
                     could be seen since…
                                         He sent out his heart
                                        It flew for him
                                       Sent out his soul, surfing
                                      in rhythmic coastal stanzas
                                     lapping a lazy shore
                                    measuring the distance
                                   beyond a vertical eclipse
                                  where water meets air
                                 and the sky merges with his dreams
         With eyes closed
               his horizontal form
                     sails through time
                           closing chapters
                                 and opening pages,
                                       dog-eared memories in numerical order
At the count down of
5          he lands ashore
4          drapes his sea-green garments around self
3          gathers dollars, dignity
2          opens his eyes
1          thanks his therapist for the session 
0          leaves, with a sense of regret.

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June 16, 2017
Copyright © Chris Green and Darren White
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Hamilton Avatar
June 24, 2017 at 3:27 PM
Great write you two, visually stunning, and awesome read, loved the ending brought it all together, was seemless, great collab guys!
White Avatar
July 1, 2017 at 7:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comment on the poem. We love this too,it has that unexpected end that indeed ties loose ends together :)
Raha Avatar
June 23, 2017 at 1:03 AM
my goodness!!! too good!!!but that is expected when you two geniuses have paired.I'm envious of the concept.lol.
White Avatar
June 23, 2017 at 12:31 PM
Hey Miraj, good to see you :) And thanks!
Lindley Avatar
June 22, 2017 at 8:05 PM
Massively creative and wondrously beautiful in its entirety my friends. Bravo to you both on this awesome piece, this is a true gem and a free verse fav, that gleams brilliantly...
White Avatar
June 23, 2017 at 12:50 AM
Robert, thhank you so much my friend :) for your wonderful words.
Turner Avatar
June 22, 2017 at 6:16 PM
I want some of that, whatever it is you guys are taking. Sounds a lot like an acid trip:) I think:) Muse on, Poets. A fun read from you and Chris. Are you holding him hostage?
White Avatar
June 23, 2017 at 12:49 AM
LOLOL Daniel. Is coffee good enough? Yes, I'm holding him hostage, would you let your muse roam free?
Mandraki Avatar
June 22, 2017 at 5:02 PM
This is simply stunning; the shift in imagery between one stanza to the next is indeed outstanding - full of wealth and richness! My favourite is Stanza six! Best, Ligella
White Avatar
June 23, 2017 at 12:48 AM
Thank you Ligella :) Chris will be pleased with your choice for stanza 6!
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June 22, 2017 at 3:41 PM
Very otherworldly cool collab, Darren and Chris. Excellent prose used to connect the two planes of reality. Creative and thought provoking poetry. Splendid use of imagery as well. Love always.
White Avatar
June 23, 2017 at 12:31 AM
It's different, isn't it Freddy? I like this one a lot.
Smith Avatar
June 22, 2017 at 2:51 PM
Very cool gents
White Avatar
June 23, 2017 at 12:31 AM
Thanks Tim :)
Sands Avatar
June 22, 2017 at 2:32 PM
Amazing poem. Really neat collaboration. I enjoyed reading this. Congratulations to the both of you! :)
White Avatar
June 22, 2017 at 2:39 PM
Thank you Heidi, I loved it too :)
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June 22, 2017 at 1:00 PM
Wow. Quite a journey this write. Well done you two xomo
White Avatar
June 22, 2017 at 1:35 PM
Thanks mo :) We enjoy writing together :)
Downing  Avatar
June 22, 2017 at 12:53 PM
OMG, this is one of the most creative of art... so beautiful guys, I like it A LOT :) this is why I haven't seen any new one from Chris because he's been collaborating ;)
White Avatar
June 22, 2017 at 1:31 PM
Yeah Akkina, it took him a long time before he had folded all those pages ;) Thanks for liking our poem :)
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