Countdown

Down to the final gasp Sweat coating acrid tongue Counting down precious seconds Fidgeting with his past Sweat coating acrid tongue Future blank in front of him Fidgeting with past Freedom at long last Future blank in front of him Staring bleakly into space Freedom at long last Time ticking oh-so-fast Staring bleakly into space No magic left in life Time ticking oh-so-fast Music of an outcast Bitter tasting are his thoughts The sand dial dips precariously Counting down precious seconds Sticking in his bond-dry throat The sand-dial dips precariously Counting down precious seconds Sticking in his bone-dry throat Down to the final gasp March 25, 2018 Entry in "Favorite Pantoum" Contest Sponsored by Laura Loo Deadline, April 22, 2018

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Michelle Faulkner

Date: 3/26/2018 9:44:00 AM

This is so cool - I think my favorite line is 'music of an outcast' - I've felt like an outcast many times- I'm going to have to learn how to write a pantoum! Have a good day gw-

Gershon Wolf
Date: 3/26/2018 10:09:00 AM

Thank you for such a nice comment, Michelle! fyi: I had never written a pantoum before, so I looked it up on poetry soup's 'types of poems,' and followed the instructions. I wrote it in about 50 minutes. Then I revised it twice, each time taking about 15 mins....and it seemed to come out ok. Good luck! :) gw