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jive time blares ju ju bees can do slide trombone breasts on view colored plastic beads dangle the men toot and hoot beer bongs rise lust fills the side walks white lines drawn ambulance and still they keep on coming party on baby Poet: D. Guzzi Contest:~SHARE A SHADORMA~

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Date: 8/28/2011 1:08:00 AM
What a fun read this is, Debbie! I could almost hear and see what's going on ;) & super thank you for my wonderful placement in your contest ^_^ !!
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Date: 8/23/2011 10:30:00 PM
Congrats Deb, nice job. Agape, Moses
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Date: 8/23/2011 9:54:00 PM
Yours is awesome, Debs. It's so funny what you told me tonight about coherent vs. inoherent. That was my feeling exactly!!! Luv, Andrea ps. thanks so much for my win in your contest. thanks for the inspiration.
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Date: 8/23/2011 2:05:00 PM
Debbie congratulations on your win in Nette's contest.wonderful approach to the contest theme.
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Date: 8/23/2011 12:20:00 PM
I haven't been on Soup for a day or so and have just seen all the contest results I've missed! Please excuse this quick message of congratulations - well done on all your wins : )
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Date: 8/23/2011 11:51:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning placement in nette's Shadorma contest. Caryl Ramsdale
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Date: 8/23/2011 10:12:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement in the contest Debbie. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/23/2011 9:24:00 AM
Congrats Debbie on your fabulous fifth place win with these elegant lines on carnival luv.. super piece... enjoy from Florida..luv..
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Date: 8/23/2011 9:15:00 AM
Congratulations on the win in the contest of nette,Debbie
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Date: 8/23/2011 4:07:00 AM
hey Debbie, congrats on your win, party on babe, David
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Date: 8/22/2011 11:11:00 PM
owwwwwwwwwwwww. Now this, I like. White lines...ambulance... got me! Congrats on the win! Cheers, Cyndi
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Date: 8/19/2011 11:38:00 PM
That was very well written, and a sharp ending! Good job!
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Date: 8/19/2011 10:02:00 PM
yo! GOOD ONE!
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