Debbie Guzzi Poet Shadorma

Cornyvale

jive time blares
ju ju bees can do
slide trombone
breasts on view
colored plastic beads dangle
the men toot and hoot

beer bongs rise
lust fills the side walks
white lines drawn
ambulance
and still they keep on coming
party on baby 

Poet: D. Guzzi
Contest:~SHARE A SHADORMA~

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Kabuteng P.Ink K. August 28, 2011 at 1:08 AM What a fun read this is, Debbie! I could almost hear and see what's going on ;) & super thank you for my wonderful placement in your contest ^_^ !!

John Freeman August 23, 2011 at 10:30 PM Congrats Deb, nice job. Agape, Moses

Andrea Dietrich August 23, 2011 at 9:54 PM Yours is awesome, Debs. It's so funny what you told me tonight about coherent vs. inoherent. That was my feeling exactly!!! Luv, Andrea ps. thanks so much for my win in your contest. thanks for the inspiration.

Kash Poet August 23, 2011 at 2:05 PM Debbie congratulations on your win in Nette's contest.wonderful approach to the contest theme.

Jack Horne August 23, 2011 at 12:20 PM I haven't been on Soup for a day or so and have just seen all the contest results I've missed! Please excuse this quick message of congratulations - well done on all your wins : )

Caryl Ramsdale August 23, 2011 at 11:51 AM Congratulations on your winning placement in nette's Shadorma contest. Caryl Ramsdale

Carol Sunshine Brown August 23, 2011 at 10:12 AM Congratulations on your placement in the contest Debbie. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 23, 2011 at 9:24 AM Congrats Debbie on your fabulous fifth place win with these elegant lines on carnival luv.. super piece... enjoy from Florida..luv..

Dr.Ram Mehta August 23, 2011 at 9:15 AM Congratulations on the win in the contest of nette,Debbie

David Williams August 23, 2011 at 4:07 AM hey Debbie, congrats on your win, party on babe, David

Cyndi Macmillan August 22, 2011 at 11:11 PM owwwwwwwwwwwww. Now this, I like. White lines...ambulance... got me! Congrats on the win! Cheers, Cyndi

Kyle Kriticos August 19, 2011 at 11:38 PM That was very well written, and a sharp ending! Good job!

Nancy Jones August 19, 2011 at 10:02 PM yo! GOOD ONE!