Cook Betty

The cooks in the restaurant found it appalling
how Betty messed up every pie she was baking
and how- from her tripping and falling -
dish after dish Cook Betty kept breaking.
What a spectacle of herself she was making!

Today, however, Betty is relieved
because of how much better she is faring.
All the other cooks are no longer peeved,
for Cook Betty has stopped all her erring
thanks to the new spectacles she's wearing!


(Revision of my previous post, which needed to be a quintain
 for Joe Maverick's Contest)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 3/30/2013 7:17:00 AM
Hello my very dear friend Andrea! I'm so glad I found the winning list of this contest and saw you on top! I didn't know that the result has already been released until I saw our dear friend Sara's congratulatory comments on mine, so I went & checked on member's area then searched on winning pages. And here it is! We both did it well again and you're the Grand Winner! Biggest congrats with my biggest sweetest hugs 2 u! Almost can't believe mine on 2nd place. We'll have a toast on our wins! Hugs
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Date: 3/29/2013 5:07:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Nice rhyme, and a form that I have used, but didn't know what it was called lol. Great work.
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Date: 3/25/2013 10:53:00 AM
Congrats on your win..Sara
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Date: 1/16/2013 8:13:00 PM
okay a revision. got it. phyl
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Date: 1/11/2013 4:13:00 AM
A great fun write with a fun story woven... Thanks for sharing!
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Date: 1/5/2013 12:21:00 AM
good luck in the contest..pd
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Date: 1/3/2013 12:53:00 PM
A beautiful write for the contest. I wish you a win. I think you will be able to see your poem placed by me on the facebook. If not send me a friend request to enable me to respond. Send a freind reuest any way. Love. -Mohammad
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Date: 1/3/2013 11:56:00 AM
What a twist at the end!!Love it!
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Date: 1/3/2013 8:17:00 AM
nothing wrong with this, Andrea, just how one reads it...
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Date: 1/2/2013 7:05:00 PM
Haha too funny, Andrea. So that's the problem! And here I thought she was a bad cook, lol. Great write :)
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Date: 1/2/2013 5:05:00 PM
Genius Andrea! You are really a smart poet, even it change into a quintain but the content still captivated :D, well done Andrea :D - bug, yanny
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Date: 1/2/2013 4:28:00 PM
Loved it! Great little tale about Cook Betty's new specs! Good luck... love, Jack xox
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Date: 1/2/2013 4:22:00 PM
Nicely done Andrea. It's interesting to see the same peice in two different forms. Both are great. See ya! :)
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Date: 1/2/2013 2:57:00 PM
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Date: 1/2/2013 2:43:00 PM
very clever and amusing!
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Date: 1/2/2013 1:51:00 PM
Hello Miss Andrea. I feel as if you know my Betty Croker early mess up days. Well I'll never be a Betty like my sis. she's the one who lashed out all the pots and pans tripping on herself and cookware. silly gal. now she's non-stop. anyhow. this is a fun poem to read. I might read it again*LUV~SKAT .
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Date: 1/2/2013 1:30:00 PM
LOL, love this fun write, my friend
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Date: 1/2/2013 1:27:00 PM
this is cute! i love it and its very fun :)
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Date: 1/2/2013 1:24:00 PM
it is amazing how you cooked this one up. Good luck in the contest. Lucilla ( Soup Mail 0
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Date: 1/2/2013 1:16:00 PM
Andrea you ask for an opinion on this Quintain and the Limerick version. Both are great But I like this one a bit more. I like the way this one flows. Good luck in the contest. I hope I was somewhat helpful. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/2/2013 1:18:00 PM
thanks, it's good to know for future reference.
Date: 1/2/2013 1:00:00 PM
Andrea ok read them both, very clever but I prefer the limerick it flows better, just me...good luck in both...David
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/2/2013 1:18:00 PM
yes, I think people are going to like the limerick form better. I know I did. But what can ya do when ya mess up on a contest with your original poem? haha.
Date: 1/2/2013 12:59:00 PM
You revised this poem perfectly for the contest Andrea! I loved your first Limerick poem, and now I love this Quintain as well, very nicely done my friend! Great Work!!
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