Andrea Dietrich Poet Quintain (English)

Cook Betty

The cooks in the restaurant found it appalling
how Betty messed up every pie she was baking
and how- from her tripping and falling -
dish after dish Cook Betty kept breaking.
What a spectacle of herself she was making!

Today, however, Betty is relieved
because of how much better she is faring.
All the other cooks are no longer peeved,
for Cook Betty has stopped all her erring
thanks to the new spectacles she's wearing!


(Revision of my previous post, which needed to be a quintain
 for Joe Maverick's Contest)

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Len Gasun March 30, 2013 at 7:17 AM Hello my very dear friend Andrea! I'm so glad I found the winning list of this contest and saw you on top! I didn't know that the result has already been released until I saw our dear friend Sara's congratulatory comments on mine, so I went & checked on member's area then searched on winning pages. And here it is! We both did it well again and you're the Grand Winner! Biggest congrats with my biggest sweetest hugs 2 u! Almost can't believe mine on 2nd place. We'll have a toast on our wins! Hugs

Wayland Bunch March 29, 2013 at 5:07 PM Congratulations on your win. Nice rhyme, and a form that I have used, but didn't know what it was called lol. Great work.

Sara Kendrick March 25, 2013 at 10:53 AM Congrats on your win..Sara

Phyllis Babcock January 16, 2013 at 8:13 PM okay a revision. got it. phyl

Anna-Marie Docherty January 11, 2013 at 4:13 AM A great fun write with a fun story woven... Thanks for sharing!

Poet Destroyer A January 5, 2013 at 12:21 AM good luck in the contest..pd

Mohammad Yamin January 3, 2013 at 12:53 PM A beautiful write for the contest. I wish you a win. I think you will be able to see your poem placed by me on the facebook. If not send me a friend request to enable me to respond. Send a freind reuest any way. Love. -Mohammad

Kash Poet January 3, 2013 at 11:56 AM What a twist at the end!!Love it!

Harry Horsman January 3, 2013 at 8:17 AM nothing wrong with this, Andrea, just how one reads it...

Toquyen Harrell January 2, 2013 at 7:05 PM Haha too funny, Andrea. So that's the problem! And here I thought she was a bad cook, lol. Great write :)

Yanny Widjanarko January 2, 2013 at 5:05 PM Genius Andrea! You are really a smart poet, even it change into a quintain but the content still captivated :D, well done Andrea :D - bug, yanny

Jack Ellison January 2, 2013 at 4:28 PM Loved it! Great little tale about Cook Betty's new specs! Good luck... love, Jack xox

Robert Johnson January 2, 2013 at 4:22 PM Nicely done Andrea. It's interesting to see the same peice in two different forms. Both are great. See ya! :)

Tim Ryerson January 2, 2013 at 2:57 PM Soup Mail reply...

Ilene Bauer January 2, 2013 at 2:43 PM very clever and amusing!

Skat A January 2, 2013 at 1:51 PM Hello Miss Andrea. I feel as if you know my Betty Croker early mess up days. Well I'll never be a Betty like my sis. she's the one who lashed out all the pots and pans tripping on herself and cookware. silly gal. now she's non-stop. anyhow. this is a fun poem to read. I might read it again*LUV~SKAT .

Jack Horne January 2, 2013 at 1:30 PM LOL, love this fun write, my friend

Juli- Michelle January 2, 2013 at 1:27 PM this is cute! i love it and its very fun :)

Lucilla Carrillo January 2, 2013 at 1:24 PM it is amazing how you cooked this one up. Good luck in the contest. Lucilla ( Soup Mail 0

Connie Gildersleeve January 2, 2013 at 1:16 PM Andrea you ask for an opinion on this Quintain and the Limerick version. Both are great But I like this one a bit more. I like the way this one flows. Good luck in the contest. I hope I was somewhat helpful. Warm Smiles, Connie Andrea Dietrich January 2, 2013 at 1:18 PM thanks, it's good to know for future reference.

David Williams January 2, 2013 at 1:00 PM Andrea ok read them both, very clever but I prefer the limerick it flows better, just me...good luck in both...David Andrea Dietrich January 2, 2013 at 1:18 PM yes, I think people are going to like the limerick form better. I know I did. But what can ya do when ya mess up on a contest with your original poem? haha.

Russell Sivey January 2, 2013 at 12:59 PM You revised this poem perfectly for the contest Andrea! I loved your first Limerick poem, and now I love this Quintain as well, very nicely done my friend! Great Work!!