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Contrasting Moods - Fiction

Surrounded by four walls.	
I feel disgust and despair.
Why can’t I snap out of it?
For listen: The city hums with listless life.
Hospitals thrive with dying patients,
oft with self inflicted excruciating pains,
more often meted out by egoistic humans
in pursuit of hedonistic pleasures,
of self satisfying needs.
 
In a quiet moment at the end of the day
sometimes I pray. Alas my heart
is enveloped in inky darkness.
Instead I hear the cries of domestic violence,
of children desecrated,
women raped,
men killed by other men.
 
I flee my loathsome house,
merge with mindless humanity,
in streets displaying their dirty linen,
intransigent in their cacophony
of indomitable bellowing ululations,
until I reach the quieter periphery
of the endless town.
 
The night is ebbing.  The first rays
of the rising sun touch a silvery dome
reflecting its rays straight into my eyes.
Instinctively I shade my face
yet the light persists.  Is it a sign?
Could there be hope for me?
Perhaps there's sense in creation.
So I close my eyes and pray.



Fiction
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Raven Avatar
July 27, 2022 at 4:25 PM
Hi Victor, you place before us a poem of contrasting emotions. You paint these emotions so strongly with your excellent wording. You bring us to the depths of despair with such poetic depth. I am so glad that this excellent poem ended with a ray of hope. There is always God, my friend. I am so glad that this was a work of fiction. Have a wonderful evening. Your friend always ..... Mike.
Edmonds  Avatar
June 24, 2022 at 8:06 PM
A wonderful insight to how it must feel to find oneself in the horror of despair. Well written fiction Victor… Belle
Poet Avatar
June 23, 2022 at 11:56 AM
This outstanding work of fiction, Victor, features a striking contrast between two important nodes: one depicting upheaval and the other, confidence. All of us take faith and a modicum of optimism. Kindest regards
Rodrigues Avatar
June 23, 2022 at 10:11 AM
Glad its fiction. You capture the encapsulating depression of your character. Everywhere he turns it is hopeless but then the bright bright sun lands on his face. It can not be ignored…a sign from God? To reach out and pray. Perhaps when he opens them, he will find some light.
Logan Avatar
June 22, 2022 at 8:24 PM
One of the most disparaging poems you’ve written, yet you end it with a ray of hope.
Kendrick Avatar
June 22, 2022 at 2:18 PM
You have put feeling and understanding in this fictional work. I am sure that many people feel like this poem's essence. You gave them an answer for the pressure and that is to seek out the presence of Jehovah. Thanks for the visit to my page. That squirrel had visited those blueberry bushes before because he knew exactly where he was going. Sara
Severo Avatar
June 22, 2022 at 12:39 AM
All I can say is I feel these words, every single one of them.Beautiful poem.
Roper Avatar
June 21, 2022 at 9:45 PM
A moment of hope. That is what we all need faith and hope. Great story. Blessings friend
Buehler Avatar
June 21, 2022 at 11:46 AM
Victor, your engrossing story takes the reader through the darkness of despair, to the final realization of where our hope lies. Magnificent! :)
M  Avatar
June 21, 2022 at 6:50 AM
Victor…I could really feel the despair in this poem….so well written! Debx
M  Avatar
June 21, 2022 at 8:06 AM
I know but you did a good job as I could feel real despair! Debx
Buhagiar Avatar
June 21, 2022 at 6:57 AM
It's only fiction.
Pandit Avatar
June 21, 2022 at 4:44 AM
Two frames of turmoil and hope-- brilliant juxtaposition in superb images. Excellent as always, Victor. Indeed there's a plan and you are a BIG part of it.
Skelly Avatar
June 21, 2022 at 3:06 AM
You have created an image of despair, happily there is a glimmer of light towards the end, so all is not lost...Delice
Seeker Avatar
June 21, 2022 at 2:36 AM
Earth life is one of stark contrast in this realm of duality. There is ugliness but there is beauty too.
George Avatar
June 21, 2022 at 2:22 AM
It seems you are passing through contradictory moods of hope and despair. Remember, most of our pains are self inflicted. When we make a conscious effort to get out of them, we can enjoy peace ! Powerful presentation Victor!
Buhagiar Avatar
June 21, 2022 at 2:56 AM
This is fiction. All my poems are really fiction.
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