Contemplation

I looked outside my window, 
just the other day
As I watched the old trees leaves,
they slowly fell away
As slowly one by one did fall
With no pain, no hurt at all
Just the whispers of the trees 
That still had all their leaves

What a lovely thing to see, if only I was that very tree.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 5/13/2020 9:11:00 AM
reading your write thus far, yep, i see you actually as those leaves (thus far) shaking, until your free....great lucidity dear poet! *winks , james
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Date: 10/16/2018 4:18:00 PM
If only we could shed our pain and problems like a tree sheds its leaves, Mockingbird.. a brilliant poem with deep and emotive introspection that truly moves me with its poignant beauty and imagery. Breathtaking poetry! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 6/9/2018 3:43:00 AM
Beautifully written. I am glad that you are not that tree because then this contemplation would not be. You have a beautiful heart that seeks out the piece that is hidden so that you can share it with all who cannot see. Thank you for this contemplation.
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Date: 6/3/2018 1:30:00 PM
I wondered what were they whispering?
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Date: 12/2/2015 7:42:00 PM
nice
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Mockingbird Stevenson
Date: 12/2/2015 8:15:00 PM
Cheers Francis!
Date: 12/2/2015 6:59:00 PM
Hello Mockingbird... nicely portrayed and my feeling is that you contemplated on being strong amongst those needing help - perhaps I'm wrong - thank you Mockingbird - Lindsay
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Mockingbird Stevenson
Date: 12/2/2015 8:19:00 PM
Very insightful, you are correct! I was trying to portray someone having to hold everything together after a unsavoury type death whilst wanting to fall apart. Thankyou for taking the time to comment, greatly appreciated Lindsay!
Date: 12/2/2015 11:56:00 AM
mmmm very nice thought that would be nice glad Jesus can take our pain if we let him
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Date: 12/1/2015 5:39:00 PM
Excellent poem. Welcome to Poetry Soup.
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Mockingbird Stevenson
Date: 12/2/2015 1:52:00 AM
Thanks Nayda, am loving the release and freedom poetry is providing me each time I write.
Date: 12/1/2015 5:42:00 AM
a nice, poignantly reflective little write, that pairs rather well with my 'fallen' poem! thanks for your comment
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Mockingbird Stevenson
Date: 12/2/2015 1:51:00 AM
I loved your poem and agree that I was able to relate.
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