Richard Lamoureux Poet Personification

Consumed

Venom drips from his tongue in honeyed splendor
He mesmerizes his audience with a Cobratic symphony
Slithering under their high expectations
He possesses a patient elegance
Skills learned in an ancient garden

His invitation so enticing 
They are the unsuspecting mice
Gobbling up snow colored treats
Imbedded in healthy labels

Glazed diabetic eyes
Look on in confusion
Lost in pretty mazes
Addicted to "bliss points"

Sugar
Sweet sugar
Tobacco's evil sister
The expansion of a nation
Spilling over belted borders

He starts them young
Keeps them within his pythoned grip
Twenty five teaspoons a day
Drains away their resistance

Supersize 
Dietize
Energize
Let them have their cake and eat it too
The many will become the few
Before they know it, they'll be eaten by you

A once great nation
Consumed

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D.W. Rodgers March 11, 2014 at 9:01 PM Sweet Richard Lamoureux March 12, 2014 at 9:17 AM Thanks Roger.

Debbie Guzzi March 3, 2014 at 7:32 PM Fantastic Richard! So many ways to take each line! Light & love Richard Lamoureux March 3, 2014 at 8:27 PM Thanks Debbie, I am happy with this one myself. I wrote it after watching an episode of fifth estate on sugar and what it is doing to our population.

Monterey Sirak March 2, 2014 at 6:29 AM Brilliant writing, my friend. I love "spilling over belted borders" You do have a unique way with words. Richard Lamoureux March 2, 2014 at 9:00 AM Hi Monterey, thanks and a big hug.

Ralph Mason February 24, 2014 at 3:22 PM enjoyed your poem richard. The 4th verse is my favorite. very visual. warm thoughts, Ralph Richard Lamoureux February 25, 2014 at 9:07 AM Thanks Ralph.

Richard D Seal February 23, 2014 at 8:19 PM Oh dear Rick, I'm a sugar addict, you've made me feel quite ill lol. Fortuneately I have one of those metabolisms and work routine that keeps the weight off, but I guess you can't tell what damage is being done inside. Problem is the manufacturers know sugar makes things taste good and we will buy things that taste good. Excellent write with subtle dual meaning mixed in. Take care, Richard Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2014 at 9:18 PM Thanks for the entertaining comment Richard.

Shadow Hamilton February 23, 2014 at 7:46 PM hmm Rick wow you hit hard in this write splendid hugs Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2014 at 9:20 PM Thanks Shadow.

Eileen Manassian February 23, 2014 at 10:16 AM Oh Richard.....This is fantastic! WOW! Different than what I expected from you, but.......so timely....so needed......so....vital. I thought at first this was about the original sin and all that, but I started to wonder about the snow colored treats. Yes...all true....Sugar does feed cancer cells! :( We need to cut back. Thanks for bringing this to light. You continue to amaze me. Hugs Eileen Manassian February 23, 2014 at 10:29 AM ARE YOU KIDDING ME?????????????? Oh....Oh I need to check! :) Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2014 at 10:27 AM It was about both, original sin has led to all other forms. I have written another poem utilizing your new form. It was fun to write. I hope I got the order right.

Edd Dino February 23, 2014 at 9:52 AM Wonderful piece. If only they could see through your lens... Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2014 at 10:27 AM Thanks Edwin.

Funom Makama February 23, 2014 at 5:03 AM This is indeed so expressive and yeah... Sugar and tobacco are some very deadly siblings sweeping through nations, not just your land. This is an excellent write up Richard. Thanks for the share Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2014 at 8:13 AM Thanks Funom, big business has is impacting our health and now scientists are looking at links between Alzheimer's and sugar they say that it is Diabetes of the brain. Also they say that sugar feeds cancer cells and cause them to draw faster.

Russell Sivey February 22, 2014 at 11:24 PM Will we as a nation become all consumed in sugar, and get sugar (diabetes) for a disease? Hey Richard, I am sorry that I have been missing your poetry, I am so sorry that I haven't been around to read your poems to the point where you notice it! I will try and be more vigilant in reading your works...I have no reason to miss your poetry, I don't want to miss reading you, I am so sorry! Please forgive me! To continue on this poem, it is a phenomenal piece my friend, Great Work!! Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2014 at 8:18 AM I hope not Russell, yet we have epidemic levels of obesity, heart disease , cancer and Alzeimers and these seem to correlate with our consumption of sugar and artificial sweeteners. The average north American consumes 25 teaspoons a day. Thanks for your kind response, I am glad we are okay.

Arthur Vaso February 22, 2014 at 11:20 PM Loved this one , and on a few levels! Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2014 at 8:24 AM Thanks Arthur.

Mama Bear February 22, 2014 at 4:44 PM Best analogy of Diabetes I have ever seen. You hit it bang on. Keep up your fantastic writing. MamaBear Hugs and Kisses Richard Lamoureux February 22, 2014 at 5:15 PM Hi Mom, I'm pleased you enjoyed it. Hugs and kisses back. How was the weekend dinner?

Chuck Melugin February 22, 2014 at 1:15 PM Richard..I loved Consumed! I wonder if Adam was bit by a sweet tooth! lol 7 chuck Richard Lamoureux February 22, 2014 at 1:54 PM Ha ha, I see you got my reference.