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Consumed

Venom drips from his tongue in honeyed splendor He mesmerizes his audience with a Cobratic symphony Slithering under their high expectations He possesses a patient elegance Skills learned in an ancient garden His invitation so enticing They are the unsuspecting mice Gobbling up snow colored treats Imbedded in healthy labels Glazed diabetic eyes Look on in confusion Lost in pretty mazes Addicted to "bliss points" Sugar Sweet sugar Tobacco's evil sister The expansion of a nation Spilling over belted borders He starts them young Keeps them within his pythoned grip Twenty five teaspoons a day Drains away their resistance Supersize Dietize Energize Let them have their cake and eat it too The many will become the few Before they know it, they'll be eaten by you A once great nation Consumed

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 3/11/2014 9:01:00 PM
Sweet
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/12/2014 9:17:00 AM
Thanks Roger.
Date: 3/3/2014 7:32:00 PM
Fantastic Richard! So many ways to take each line! Light & love
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/3/2014 8:27:00 PM
Thanks Debbie, I am happy with this one myself. I wrote it after watching an episode of fifth estate on sugar and what it is doing to our population.
Date: 3/2/2014 6:29:00 AM
Brilliant writing, my friend. I love "spilling over belted borders" You do have a unique way with words.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/2/2014 9:00:00 AM
Hi Monterey, thanks and a big hug.
Date: 2/24/2014 3:22:00 PM
enjoyed your poem richard. The 4th verse is my favorite. very visual. warm thoughts, Ralph
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/25/2014 9:07:00 AM
Thanks Ralph.
Date: 2/23/2014 8:19:00 PM
Oh dear Rick, I'm a sugar addict, you've made me feel quite ill lol. Fortuneately I have one of those metabolisms and work routine that keeps the weight off, but I guess you can't tell what damage is being done inside. Problem is the manufacturers know sugar makes things taste good and we will buy things that taste good. Excellent write with subtle dual meaning mixed in. Take care, Richard
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/23/2014 9:18:00 PM
Thanks for the entertaining comment Richard.
Date: 2/23/2014 7:46:00 PM
hmm Rick wow you hit hard in this write splendid hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/23/2014 9:20:00 PM
Thanks Shadow.
Date: 2/23/2014 10:16:00 AM
Oh Richard.....This is fantastic! WOW! Different than what I expected from you, but.......so timely....so needed......so....vital. I thought at first this was about the original sin and all that, but I started to wonder about the snow colored treats. Yes...all true....Sugar does feed cancer cells! :( We need to cut back. Thanks for bringing this to light. You continue to amaze me. Hugs
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 2/23/2014 10:29:00 AM
ARE YOU KIDDING ME?????????????? Oh....Oh I need to check! :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/23/2014 10:27:00 AM
It was about both, original sin has led to all other forms. I have written another poem utilizing your new form. It was fun to write. I hope I got the order right.
Date: 2/23/2014 9:52:00 AM
Wonderful piece. If only they could see through your lens...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/23/2014 10:27:00 AM
Thanks Edwin.
Date: 2/23/2014 5:03:00 AM
This is indeed so expressive and yeah... Sugar and tobacco are some very deadly siblings sweeping through nations, not just your land. This is an excellent write up Richard. Thanks for the share
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/23/2014 8:13:00 AM
Thanks Funom, big business has is impacting our health and now scientists are looking at links between Alzheimer's and sugar they say that it is Diabetes of the brain. Also they say that sugar feeds cancer cells and cause them to draw faster.
Date: 2/22/2014 11:24:00 PM
Will we as a nation become all consumed in sugar, and get sugar (diabetes) for a disease? Hey Richard, I am sorry that I have been missing your poetry, I am so sorry that I haven't been around to read your poems to the point where you notice it! I will try and be more vigilant in reading your works...I have no reason to miss your poetry, I don't want to miss reading you, I am so sorry! Please forgive me! To continue on this poem, it is a phenomenal piece my friend, Great Work!!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/23/2014 8:18:00 AM
I hope not Russell, yet we have epidemic levels of obesity, heart disease , cancer and Alzeimers and these seem to correlate with our consumption of sugar and artificial sweeteners. The average north American consumes 25 teaspoons a day. Thanks for your kind response, I am glad we are okay.
Date: 2/22/2014 11:23:00 PM
Obesity is such a huge problem around the world now. There's a "serpent" everywhere you look. Nice write Ron
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/23/2014 8:23:00 AM
Thanks Ron, they are now discovering things called obesidens in our food chain which are leading to our obesity as a nation. If we follow the money iwe will see who is benefiting from this epidemic. Eventually our health care systems will be bankrupted.
Date: 2/22/2014 11:20:00 PM
Loved this one , and on a few levels!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/23/2014 8:24:00 AM
Thanks Arthur.
Date: 2/22/2014 4:44:00 PM
Best analogy of Diabetes I have ever seen. You hit it bang on. Keep up your fantastic writing. MamaBear Hugs and Kisses
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/22/2014 5:15:00 PM
Hi Mom, I'm pleased you enjoyed it. Hugs and kisses back. How was the weekend dinner?
Date: 2/22/2014 1:15:00 PM
Richard..I loved Consumed! I wonder if Adam was bit by a sweet tooth! lol 7 chuck
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/22/2014 1:54:00 PM
Ha ha, I see you got my reference.