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Conscious Rising

Flair for me your wisdom, oh weeping willow tree You look as though your might has fallen, hanging limp from limb Cry for seeds of sacred trust that scattered 'cross the sea. Reunite the shattered hopes for those who learn to swim You look as though your might has fallen, hanging limp from limb The sands of time have formed a desert 'round your holy roots Reunite the shattered hopes for those who learn to swim Dig for water 'neath the sand and you may bear your fruit The sands of time have formed a desert 'round your holy roots Cry for seeds of sacred trust that scattered 'cross the sea Dig for water 'neath the sand and you may bear your fruit Flair for me your wisdom, oh weeping willow tree

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Joshua Lacey

Date: 10/7/2009 4:29:00 PM

willow trees certainly have a weeping characteristic abou them! good job :)

P Sheart

Date: 9/24/2009 2:55:00 PM

Congrats!!! Love Light Truth Patricia

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/24/2009 12:24:00 PM

Wonderful write, Yoni! Congratulations on being in the round-one finals! Love you, Carolyn, and good luck!

James Fraser

Date: 9/24/2009 11:58:00 AM

Yoni, congratulations in getting past round one of the competition, good luck >> James

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/24/2009 10:23:00 AM

Congratulations on your 2 poems making it through the first round.Wishing you the best in the finals Yoni. Love, Carol

James Fraser

Date: 8/28/2009 5:09:00 PM

Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Yoni>>James

Neva Brown

Date: 8/26/2009 9:21:00 AM

very unique ! Makes me want to try that style, one I have never known before. Nicely done : )

Krista Kurth

Date: 8/26/2009 6:28:00 AM

congratulations on your feature, Yoni. Thought provoking poem and interesting form - I learn something new everytime I come to this group. I had never heard of pantoum before reading your poem. All the best, Krista

Ololade Omololu

Date: 8/26/2009 5:45:00 AM

i'm really feeling this.congratulations!

Trudy Diane Rider

Date: 8/24/2009 1:10:00 PM

Congratualtions on being featured this week! Wonderful poem! ~Trudy~

James Peranteau

Date: 8/24/2009 8:18:00 AM

Yoni,..congrats on this fantastic poem being featured this week !!! james

Diane Christian

Date: 8/24/2009 4:01:00 AM

congratulations on your featured poem God bless you from diane

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/24/2009 3:53:00 AM

Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Yoni. Love, Carol

John Freeman

Date: 7/18/2009 3:00:00 PM

Great perspective, Yoni, Bravo! Godly love Moses!

L'Nass Shango

Date: 5/4/2009 6:44:00 AM

Here is a poem that dsiplay your genius as a lyrical weaver of words. I love the philosophy nestled in a nest of melodious imageries. Good write

Date: 4/3/2009 4:32:00 PM

Interesting reflection. Nice use of personification. The title adds to the piece in a creative way. Best wishes with your writing. Karen

Sally J E Gomm

Date: 4/2/2009 5:01:00 PM

i dont know any constructive writing or form and just write from my soul - very primitive. But appreciate the beautiful images and feelings you encourage from your learned writing even for a basic uneducated mind like mine. thank you so much for something i may have never come across or aspire to without this websited. Sally - all your work much appreciated.

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 3/30/2009 7:06:00 AM

'...cry for bonds of sacred trust,' ...a wonderful phrase! Excellent construction with effective repetitions and a smooth and easy flow... Well done my friend! Best wishes, Keith