Yoni Dvorkis Poet Pantoum

Conscious Rising

Flair for me your wisdom, oh weeping willow tree 
You look as though your might has fallen, hanging limp from limb
Cry for seeds of sacred trust that scattered 'cross the sea.
Reunite the shattered hopes for those who learn to swim 

You look as though your might has fallen, hanging limp from limb
The sands of time have formed a desert 'round your holy roots
Reunite the shattered hopes for those who learn to swim
Dig for water 'neath the sand and you may bear your fruit

The sands of time have formed a desert 'round your holy roots
Cry for seeds of sacred trust that scattered 'cross the sea
Dig for water 'neath the sand and you may bear your fruit
Flair for me your wisdom, oh weeping willow tree

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Joshua Lacey October 7, 2009 at 4:29 PM willow trees certainly have a weeping characteristic abou them! good job :)

P Sheart September 24, 2009 at 2:55 PM Congrats!!! Love Light Truth Patricia

Carolyn Devonshire September 24, 2009 at 12:24 PM Wonderful write, Yoni! Congratulations on being in the round-one finals! Love you, Carolyn, and good luck!

James Fraser September 24, 2009 at 11:58 AM Yoni, congratulations in getting past round one of the competition, good luck >> James

Carol Sunshine Brown September 24, 2009 at 10:23 AM Congratulations on your 2 poems making it through the first round.Wishing you the best in the finals Yoni. Love, Carol

James Fraser August 28, 2009 at 5:09 PM Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Yoni>>James

Neva Brown August 26, 2009 at 9:21 AM very unique ! Makes me want to try that style, one I have never known before. Nicely done : )

Krista Kurth August 26, 2009 at 6:28 AM congratulations on your feature, Yoni. Thought provoking poem and interesting form - I learn something new everytime I come to this group. I had never heard of pantoum before reading your poem. All the best, Krista

Ololade Omololu August 26, 2009 at 5:45 AM i'm really feeling this.congratulations!

Trudy Diane Rider August 24, 2009 at 1:10 PM Congratualtions on being featured this week! Wonderful poem! ~Trudy~

James Peranteau August 24, 2009 at 8:18 AM Yoni,..congrats on this fantastic poem being featured this week !!! james

Diane Christian August 24, 2009 at 4:01 AM congratulations on your featured poem God bless you from diane

Carol Sunshine Brown August 24, 2009 at 3:53 AM Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Yoni. Love, Carol

John Freeman July 18, 2009 at 3:00 PM Great perspective, Yoni, Bravo! Godly love Moses!

L'Nass Shango May 4, 2009 at 6:44 AM Here is a poem that dsiplay your genius as a lyrical weaver of words. I love the philosophy nestled in a nest of melodious imageries. Good write

April 3, 2009 at 4:32 PM Interesting reflection. Nice use of personification. The title adds to the piece in a creative way. Best wishes with your writing. Karen

Sally J E Gomm April 2, 2009 at 5:01 PM i dont know any constructive writing or form and just write from my soul - very primitive. But appreciate the beautiful images and feelings you encourage from your learned writing even for a basic uneducated mind like mine. thank you so much for something i may have never come across or aspire to without this websited. Sally - all your work much appreciated.

Keith Bickerstaffe March 30, 2009 at 7:06 AM '...cry for bonds of sacred trust,' ...a wonderful phrase! Excellent construction with effective repetitions and a smooth and easy flow... Well done my friend! Best wishes, Keith