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Connect the Dots

an aggregate world
made up of many
particles that breathe
that mingle to form
lives that touch others

parallel lives
some are lucky
intersecting
at random points

organisms
influence
each other

far...near
we are

one 


*Sept. 14, 2010
written for Rick's The Universe contest :)

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De R

Date: 12/16/2011 12:54:00 PM

Now that's what I was talking about in my email, even if we are far away, we can still be friends. The absolute truth in the last line. Hugs, Emilia

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/25/2010 10:11:00 AM

Congratulations Nikko on your win in Rick's contest. Love, Carol

Rinki Nandy

Date: 9/23/2010 1:03:00 PM

Congratulations on this wonderful write Nikko, i admire the ending..far n near ..we are ultimately one...quite philosophical REgards ..rinki

Gordon Hickman

Date: 9/21/2010 9:11:00 AM

This one is quite profound, and shows a very inventive mind Nikko, have you read your soup mail? You are definitely a fav' poet! hicky.

Royal Trevino

Date: 9/20/2010 11:06:00 AM

ah, i love this one, the ending is cool, really enjoyed, =(^.^)=Royal

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/17/2010 12:57:00 PM

Congratulations on this wonderful write

Caryl Muzzey

Date: 9/17/2010 9:17:00 AM

A wonderful write, congratulations on your win. Caryl

Francine Roberts

Date: 9/17/2010 7:55:00 AM

nice one , congrats on your HM in the contest

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/17/2010 6:52:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Nikko in Rick Parise's contest "The Universe" Love, Carol

Gordon Hickman

Date: 9/17/2010 2:09:00 AM

I Like this one Nikko, it conveys the idea that everything on this World comes from the same source? and in that way we are all related. Quite profound, and very well put. By all means call me hicky which I use as my pen-name.

Wilma Neels

Date: 9/17/2010 12:49:00 AM

Nikko congrats on your win in Rick's contest (",)

Tahera Mannan

Date: 9/16/2010 10:27:00 PM

a great write. Many congratulations on your HM.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/16/2010 3:29:00 PM

Congrats Nikko on your HM in the Universe contest.. a lovely piece my friend.. enjoy your honor tonight with luv...

James Fraser

Date: 9/16/2010 1:36:00 PM

Congratulation's Nikko on your fine win in Rick's contest. Kool questions in your poem, nice one >> James

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/16/2010 1:21:00 PM

All aspects of the universe work hand-in-hand and as we study science we try to "Connect the Dots." Intuitive write, Nikko! Congratulations on your placement in Rick's contest. Love, Carolyn

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/14/2010 8:59:00 PM

wow, I really like how you did yours, Nikko, the interconnections of the universe.One of the better ones I've seen. Good luck in the contest. LUv, Andrea

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/14/2010 5:09:00 PM

Unique and original sweet friend Nikko.. good luck with this dynamic piece ... enjoyed tonight.. between my business paperwork and souping ..haha..

Katherine Stella

Date: 9/14/2010 4:54:00 PM

nice shape looks like a funnel very intresting concept here like frank said sure winner also thanks for all your wonderful comments on my works will be back soon to give ya more been sick lately keep up the great writing blessings to you and family

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/14/2010 8:59:00 AM

Great write that reads like a sure winner to me...Good luck..I enjoyed reading this one this morn. I glad that I chose it to be among poems that I read today..Thanks for stopping by and reading my work about the airplane ride over the Grand Canyon...I had my face in a barf bag as soon as we hit the canyon and turbulence praying the whole time ...Please let me not throw up in this air plane..God heard and answered my prayers for sure..Sara