Debbie Duncan Poet Dramatic Verse

Concrete Angel

She came down from above. 
Through the wind and the rain.
All she carried was love. 

She stood tall. 
As she took it all. 
This day was bound. 
Death was always near. 

Wanted to carry the flames. 
 If she make's it through.
This concrete life of pain. 
She'll see butterflies, not tears.

I know she has angels near her.
They'd like to take her home.
Though she chooses to stay here.

I see her delicate fluttering wings.
Of flaming silver, blue and gold.
  She must learn to use them. 
That's all it will take, for her to fly. 
From this perverted degrading place.  



6pm  5/7/2012

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Karen Anglesey August 3, 2013 at 11:17 AM Hi Debbie, hope to read more of your very touching poetry.... The Angels can't heal them but they can be a comfort.... wonderful poem you have written Debbie Duncan August 3, 2013 at 3:29 PM Thank you Karen ;}

Eileen Manassian May 2, 2013 at 10:48 PM Hauntingly sad, Debbie...but beautiful in flow. Very touching write. Hope all is well. Debbie Duncan May 2, 2013 at 11:01 PM Thank you ;}

Robert Johnson April 23, 2013 at 1:49 PM Makes more sense once you explained the shriners childrens hospital. The human essence still stands. God bless us all. Peace. :) Debbie Duncan April 23, 2013 at 3:02 PM ;} guess I should write it up there

Don Johnson April 23, 2013 at 12:35 AM the ever helpful angels, we meet along the way, ones who will pick you up, till you are happy, bloody aye Debbie Duncan April 23, 2013 at 2:22 AM ;}

Cherl Dunn April 22, 2013 at 5:11 PM Great visual write. Debbie Duncan April 22, 2013 at 5:34 PM thank you ;}

Robert Johnson April 22, 2013 at 5:04 PM Speaks to the very essence of humanity that dwells in each of us. May soft breezes give her lift. Peace. :) Debbie Duncan April 22, 2013 at 6:13 PM thank you ;}

Valerie The Heavy Hearted Poet April 22, 2013 at 7:59 AM When I read this, I could feel the pain and torment. This is a poem that sends a powerful message. It was a privilege reading your pem today. Thank you!!! Debbie Duncan April 22, 2013 at 2:20 PM Thank you ;}

Jack Jordan April 21, 2013 at 9:30 PM There's powerful imagery in your poem; very visual (show, don't tell...). Nice work... Jack

Donna Jones April 21, 2013 at 6:33 PM I believe we do have angels on our shoulders when we need them...great poem Debbie....

Richard D Seal April 21, 2013 at 4:58 PM Hi Debbie, Yes very good, sometimes the world can get you down. Take care,Richard Debbie Duncan April 21, 2013 at 11:04 PM ;}

Poet Tacito April 21, 2013 at 3:08 PM A stunning piece. A harsh reality check. I highly enjoyed this. Debbie Duncan April 21, 2013 at 10:39 PM ;}

Karen Anglesey April 21, 2013 at 1:31 PM Debbie, Very quality write. I like your perspective on this subject. I am attempting to write a poem about death. This one is superb Debbie Duncan April 21, 2013 at 5:43 PM thank you Karen ;}

Shining Bright April 21, 2013 at 12:50 PM Beautiful writing Debbie Duncan April 21, 2013 at 5:42 PM thank you ;}

Duke Beaufort April 20, 2013 at 10:07 AM the world, but this story has pre-empted it all. I hope your wings are strong and thank you for all your kind comments. Perhaps I will decide to write something soon. Debbie Duncan April 20, 2013 at 6:10 PM ;}

Duke Beaufort April 20, 2013 at 9:58 AM I hope you don't mean that the whole earth is perverted and degrading. I thought I was the only one who thought like that. Actually, there are some wonderful things, but it's getting harder and harder to resist the culture of selfishness we have. I really like how you took some inspiration from Debra. From your work and comments, I believe you do have wings. Nice hearing from you as always. I am so bludgeoned by Boston right now, I can't think. There is more happening in the rest of.... Debbie Duncan April 20, 2013 at 5:45 PM thanks for reading Duke ;}

Debra Squyres April 20, 2013 at 7:03 AM Wow... this is good !!! Emotional piece !!! Thanks for reading and commenting on my two Angel poems... I like where you took this one..into the concrete of reality Debbie Duncan April 20, 2013 at 5:28 PM thank you Debbie ;}

Jack Horne April 19, 2013 at 2:39 PM emotive write indeed, my friend Debbie Duncan April 20, 2013 at 1:19 AM thank you

Sara Kendrick April 18, 2013 at 3:27 PM Very expressive and emotive work that you have penned in this one..Enjoyed reading today..Thanks for stopping by..I hope that this is just a work not anyone in your life right now..Sara Debbie Duncan April 20, 2013 at 12:58 AM thank you Sara for reading;}

Poet Destroyer A April 18, 2013 at 2:17 PM Debbie, hoping her wings will fly and carry her to that special place. A delicate image, waiting a sweeter place.... enjoyed, xox >LINDA< xox Debbie Duncan April 18, 2013 at 4:02 PM Thank you for reading ;}

Anne-Lise Andresen April 18, 2013 at 4:40 AM - A very well written poem Debbie, I love it. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :) Debbie Duncan April 18, 2013 at 11:58 AM Thank you Anne - Lisa ;}

Andrea Dietrich April 18, 2013 at 1:05 AM I really liked your poem. Too many concrete angels in this world!! Debbie Duncan April 18, 2013 at 11:57 AM Yes, there is too many concrete angels.