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The bloodstained blade slipped from my trembling hand Their affair and her conception, I wouldn't try to understand I ignored his piteous cries and stabbed his heart with my knife He lied in dismal denial, but her belly had been scanned My husband crossed the threshold when he deceived me, his wife Required words, Bloodstained, conception, piteous, dismal, threshold Rhyme time with 5 contest Sponsored by laura Loo 09-21-17

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Constance La France

Date: 10/12/2017 6:56:00 AM

Jan, amazing how you got those words in so few lines, wonderful, CONGRATULATIONS!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2017 8:23:00 AM

Thanks Constance I was delighted to place so well:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/11/2017 2:05:00 PM

Well done, Jan...all those words in five lines with such an intriguing murder story too! Congratulations on your 1st Place Win. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2017 2:28:00 PM

Thanks Sandra:-) I set myself the challenge of getting all 5 lines in one stanza and was delighted LuLoo liked it so much:-) hugs Jan xx

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 10/10/2017 11:02:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Jan - great stuff!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2017 3:10:00 AM

Thanks Greg:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 10/10/2017 8:52:00 AM

Congrats on your win Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 10/10/2017 9:16:00 AM

Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 10/10/2017 7:47:00 AM

Congrats, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/10/2017 9:16:00 AM

Thanks Dale:-) hugs Jan xx

John Gondolf

Date: 10/10/2017 6:13:00 AM

Jan, congrats! This is a great poem.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/10/2017 6:51:00 AM

Thanks John I'm delighted to place so well:-) hugs jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 10/10/2017 5:59:00 AM

what a great poem lovely Jan! thank you and congrats :)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/10/2017 6:50:00 AM

Many thanks Luloo!!! I thought the poem may be too short but I was determined to get all the words into one stanza and I'm SO delighted with my top spot:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 9/21/2017 7:43:00 PM

Wow, amazing write, Jan, good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve ~`*

Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2017 3:20:00 AM

My muse was in a dark frame of mind yesterday Eve. The poem may be too short for LuLoo but I managed to get all 5 words in one stanza which was my aim:-) hugs jan xx

Russell Sivey

Date: 9/21/2017 4:05:00 PM

This is a poem so different than what you normally write that I forgot who had written it! I really enjoyed reading your frightful poem this afternoon my friend! What a glorious piece, good luck in contest! Great Work!!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2017 5:27:00 PM

It would appear my muse is in a dark frame of mind lol I hope her humour is back tomorrow Russell:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 9/21/2017 1:37:00 PM

Crime of passion...I'd plead insanity

Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2017 2:31:00 PM

I couldn't resist a dark write :-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/21/2017 1:35:00 PM

- Murder !!! ... DEEP AND DARK, JAN ! - Well done :) - GL in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2017 2:31:00 PM

Thanks Anne Lise:-) hugs jan xx

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 9/21/2017 10:27:00 AM

Love your muse :) xomo!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2017 12:28:00 PM

:-) hugs jan xx

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 9/21/2017 11:05:00 AM

I meant to say "I" love your muse ;) she clearly loves you.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2017 10:30:00 AM

I worry about her Mo lol:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 9/21/2017 9:28:00 AM

Jan, you admitted to this and even posted a picture!!! There should be a bonus for you using all 5 words cohesively in 5 lines. Bravo!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2017 9:47:00 AM

LOl the only thing I admit to is my muse is never predictable lol:-) hugs jan xx

Winged Warrior

Date: 9/21/2017 8:49:00 AM

The dark side of Jan Allison...well done my friend, I like the dark side of you lol...best of luck...^WW^

Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2017 8:51:00 AM

I never know where my muse will take me ^WW^ but i challenged myself to write the poem in 5 lines. it's possibly too short for the sponsor so i understand if I don't place:-) hugs jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/21/2017 8:38:00 AM

Wow! Quite dark! Well written! GL on contest, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2017 8:41:00 AM

Thanks Kim i thought i would challenge myself to get the 5 words into one stanza and it worked out quite well!:-) hugs jan xx