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Conception Deception

The bloodstained blade slipped from my trembling hand
Their affair and her conception, I wouldn't try to understand
I ignored his piteous cries and stabbed his heart with my knife
He lied in dismal denial,  but her belly had been scanned
My husband crossed the threshold when he deceived me, his wife

Required words, Bloodstained, conception, piteous, dismal, threshold

Rhyme time with 5 contest
Sponsored by laura Loo

09-21-17

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Constance La France Date: 10/12/2017 6:56:00 AM Jan, amazing how you got those words in so few lines, wonderful, CONGRATULATIONS! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/12/2017 8:23:00 AM Thanks Constance I was delighted to place so well:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight Date: 10/11/2017 2:05:00 PM Well done, Jan...all those words in five lines with such an intriguing murder story too! Congratulations on your 1st Place Win. Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/11/2017 2:28:00 PM Thanks Sandra:-) I set myself the challenge of getting all 5 lines in one stanza and was delighted LuLoo liked it so much:-) hugs Jan xx

Gregory Richard Barden Date: 10/10/2017 11:02:00 PM Congratulations on your win, Jan - great stuff! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/11/2017 3:10:00 AM Thanks Greg:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May Date: 10/10/2017 8:52:00 AM Congrats on your win Jan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/10/2017 9:16:00 AM Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Dale Gregory Cozart Date: 10/10/2017 7:47:00 AM Congrats, Jan! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/10/2017 9:16:00 AM Thanks Dale:-) hugs Jan xx

John Gondolf Date: 10/10/2017 6:13:00 AM Jan, congrats! This is a great poem. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/10/2017 6:51:00 AM Thanks John I'm delighted to place so well:-) hugs jan xx

Beautiful Scars Date: 10/10/2017 5:59:00 AM what a great poem lovely Jan! thank you and congrats :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/10/2017 6:50:00 AM Many thanks Luloo!!! I thought the poem may be too short but I was determined to get all the words into one stanza and I'm SO delighted with my top spot:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper Date: 9/21/2017 7:43:00 PM Wow, amazing write, Jan, good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve ~`* Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/22/2017 3:20:00 AM My muse was in a dark frame of mind yesterday Eve. The poem may be too short for LuLoo but I managed to get all 5 words in one stanza which was my aim:-) hugs jan xx

Russell Sivey Date: 9/21/2017 4:05:00 PM This is a poem so different than what you normally write that I forgot who had written it! I really enjoyed reading your frightful poem this afternoon my friend! What a glorious piece, good luck in contest! Great Work!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/21/2017 5:27:00 PM It would appear my muse is in a dark frame of mind lol I hope her humour is back tomorrow Russell:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith Date: 9/21/2017 1:37:00 PM Crime of passion...I'd plead insanity Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/21/2017 2:31:00 PM I couldn't resist a dark write :-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 9/21/2017 1:35:00 PM - Murder !!! ... DEEP AND DARK, JAN ! - Well done :) - GL in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/21/2017 2:31:00 PM Thanks Anne Lise:-) hugs jan xx

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 9/21/2017 10:27:00 AM Love your muse :) xomo! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/21/2017 12:28:00 PM :-) hugs jan xx Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 9/21/2017 11:05:00 AM I meant to say "I" love your muse ;) she clearly loves you. Jan Allison Date: 9/21/2017 10:30:00 AM I worry about her Mo lol:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane Date: 9/21/2017 9:28:00 AM Jan, you admitted to this and even posted a picture!!! There should be a bonus for you using all 5 words cohesively in 5 lines. Bravo! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/21/2017 9:47:00 AM LOl the only thing I admit to is my muse is never predictable lol:-) hugs jan xx

Winged Warrior Date: 9/21/2017 8:49:00 AM The dark side of Jan Allison...well done my friend, I like the dark side of you lol...best of luck...^WW^ Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/21/2017 8:51:00 AM I never know where my muse will take me ^WW^ but i challenged myself to write the poem in 5 lines. it's possibly too short for the sponsor so i understand if I don't place:-) hugs jan xx

Kim Rodrigues Date: 9/21/2017 8:38:00 AM Wow! Quite dark! Well written! GL on contest, Jan! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/21/2017 8:41:00 AM Thanks Kim i thought i would challenge myself to get the 5 words into one stanza and it worked out quite well!:-) hugs jan xx