Laura Leiser Poet Rhyme

Conceited Love

What ills you elicit with your mordacious tongue
shackled am I, while you trifle with my love.
You horde my affections with a cartridge of conceit
then loiter in self pity as I, wizened, exit with relief.



Written on 3/28/2017

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Debbie Duncan May 20, 2017 at 5:13 PM Oh, I remember this kind of love, I'm thinking it's the end of a love affair. Like you said "exit with relief" 7 for sure :)

John Michaels April 9, 2017 at 2:09 AM Some great imagery here! Well done on your high placing, Laura!

John Hamilton April 8, 2017 at 4:29 PM Great use of the words 4 lines also amazing, congrats on great 2nd place! Laura Leiser April 8, 2017 at 5:53 PM Thank you for my placement in your challenging contest, John! I appreciate it very much :)

Phyllis Babcock March 30, 2017 at 11:25 AM Nicely done on this eight word challenge.Very creative. love phyl Laura Leiser March 31, 2017 at 4:38 PM Thanks, Phyllis! Glad you liked this. :)

Nette Onclaud March 29, 2017 at 2:18 PM wow, laura.. you enchant me with your creativity!..huggs Laura Leiser March 29, 2017 at 4:00 PM Thank you, Nette! Such a nice compliment from such a creative one as you! :)

Emile Pinet March 29, 2017 at 11:54 AM Your poem say a lot with little wording and that is hard to do. I felt the emotional force behind these words. Emile. Laura Leiser March 29, 2017 at 4:00 PM Thanks so much, Emile! Glad you liked this one :)

Chris Green March 28, 2017 at 5:16 PM Really nicely done Laura. You used the contest words perfectly and gave us a complete poetic story in four short lines. Good luck in the contest. Laura Leiser March 28, 2017 at 7:03 PM Thanks, Chris! Glad you liked it :)