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Complicated Moons

they hid lies behind complicated moons,
'til constellations turned to dust
& the sun vehemently objected,
interceding on truth's behalf
the earth did not split apart,
merely splintered every
 tiny fragment of trust

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Andrea Dietrich

October 22, 2016 at 9:17 PM

wow, great metaphor here, Paloma. the last line is stunning!!!

Joseph P. DiMino

October 22, 2016 at 5:13 PM

Wonderful, symbolic work; love the imagery and deep sense of this piece. Great writing, Paloma! Yes, the sun hears everything both light and dark, and the universe is very much responsive to our souls--the truths and lies we harbor therein. If we want a healthy atmosphere to live in, we need to have healthy minds and hearts.

Robert Warlov

October 22, 2016 at 3:30 PM

Moon-light truth may resolve into bird-song

Charmaine Chircop

October 22, 2016 at 2:13 PM

Oh those complicated moons...I wonder if the sun will shine and reflect a way through the moons revealing their lies..and what about fragments of trust..dust..Still between secrets and lies some honesty survives..I love your poem..Its full of layers to discover...WoW.

Heidi Sands

October 22, 2016 at 9:20 AM

Wow . This one is just incredible. Thanks for sharing. I like it. :)

Daniel Turner

October 22, 2016 at 9:08 AM

I think I'd like to tell you a few whispered lies. Lol Just joking. Nobody likes being lied to. Once that bond of trust has been broken in a relationship, it's pretty much doomed. Nicely penned, Paloma.