John Smith Poet Sonnet

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You comment on my poem; I on yours.
"Your rhyme, meter and wit are exquisite,"
I say.  You reply, "Yours I revisit
on the net; love how your irony gores." 

Now, seated in the bar our chat is light
for hours on synecdoche and stuff'll
spice up a poem and maybe ruffle
feathers.  Suddenly, it's time for, "Good night."

And then it dawns on me, the irony, 
that our poetry is not what our talk
is all about.  Apt metaphors might walk
me through this, but I stumble on blindly. 

"I've lots more to say," I say.  You reply,
"Okay then; your room or mine."  I sigh. 


*I've not personally met a Poetry Soup 'commentator,' but I can dream. 


Entered in Brian Strand's contest, 'Any Top Twenty Poem', February 6, 2012.

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Chiquitachiamaka Baity September 18, 2011 at 10:25 PM nice one John... dream on my friend....thats what i do...lol...great write...smiles...chiquita

Nancy Jones September 11, 2011 at 3:38 PM Your rhyme, wit and meter are exquisite!... oh wait, that's rhyme, meter and wit. Either way :) Happy day ~N

Elizabeth Wesley September 9, 2011 at 5:16 PM Love the last two lines that infuse such meaning into the rest of it. So special.

Jack Horne September 9, 2011 at 10:23 AM LOL, one should always live in hope, John

Don Johnson September 8, 2011 at 6:48 PM inspection of the inner workings of the poet, keep dreaming, the 'met commentator' can come to pass, interesting view mate...

Wilma Neels September 8, 2011 at 9:53 AM I have no problem with dreaming :) it is all good, sometimes it is all we have, thanks for the enjoyment with this one John :) I would say dream on!!

Andrea Dietrich September 8, 2011 at 12:09 AM hahaha. Dream on, sweet john, dream on. (but you never know, I have several friends who met their future spouses in the poetry world!!) John Smith September 8, 2011 at 12:22 AM Hey, you laugh, but poetry is made out of dreams.

Jack Ross Jr. September 7, 2011 at 10:47 PM very methaphoric write John, sounds like you have a romance in bloom enjoyed........your mate....old Jack

Sara Kendrick September 7, 2011 at 6:05 PM Very romantic work about an interesting topic..I am glad that I chose this one to read this eve..Good luck with the romantic encounter with one that you have met on soup..Thanks for the funny review of my work..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart September 7, 2011 at 4:50 PM an interesting impressive piece John .. direct and definite ... generalized comments sometimes are generic but many are full of emotion luv.. truly luv this one much..