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Come Sit By My Side

[Hymnal Measure Structure, a4,b3,c4,d3 with internal rhyme] Come sit by my side, my sweet August bride, We’ll speak of the things we hold dear. Of wind in the trees and fire in their leaves At our favorite time of the year. Don’t you remember how deep in December We’d listen to snow softly falling? Though faint in the ear its message was clear, A breeze from up north had come calling. I wish there were more than just these twenty-four Hours to spend in a day. Then we’d go far, our guide the North Star, And surely—at length—find our way. But what to do until then, my dear, treasured friend, As hope’s often met with dismay. Hearing all the day’s news and questionable truths, The will to do good goes astray. So let’s run and hide, my wise August bride To a place that no one can find. On a mist-covered shore we’ll be happy once more, As we leave the real world far behind. 5th Place, Any Poem Goes, Poet Destroyer A

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Date: 5/18/2015 1:53:00 PM
MARK, Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. SKAT love
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Date: 12/19/2013 6:44:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your well deserved win, Mark
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Date: 12/18/2013 10:55:00 PM
Hi Mark, :) sending smiles.. Congratulations & thanks for supporting my contest. always~ LINDA
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Date: 12/18/2013 5:29:00 PM
Mark Such a wonderful, beautiful. charming. loving, sweet, passionate and caring write. Full of feeling and emotion expressed so fondly for this special someone. I could feel the love pouring out. Nice job Thanks for the great comment on my Two Becomes Three poem.
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Date: 12/18/2013 7:27:00 PM
Robin, so kind of you to visit and dig out one of my earlier pieces, written to my special one. I treasure your words and will return to them often and come back to your page as well.
Date: 11/15/2013 6:11:00 PM
Great flow to this poem I enjoyed it very much.
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Date: 11/17/2013 2:15:00 PM
Joseph, thank you very much for stopping by to comment on my poem. I look forward to reading yours as well. All the very best to you.
Date: 11/12/2013 5:38:00 PM
I like this rhyme..I has such good rhythm, flow and rhyme to it..I am glad that I chose it to read today..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Date: 11/17/2013 2:17:00 PM
Sara, I so gratified that you stopped by my page to take a look at this rhyme. Your comments both touch and humble me. I look forward to more of your verse.
Date: 11/10/2013 12:53:00 PM
Smooth rhythm-and-rhyme you've got going here, Mark. We rhymers are a dying breed so it's always refreshing to meet one. Hey, lucky your bride. I hope you read this to her, my friend. Licia :-)
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Date: 11/10/2013 3:30:00 PM
Delysia, it is so nice to hear from you. What a lovely name. Rhyme remains the most elegant way to connect words and feelings. I'm grateful when it comes and thankful when others read it. In fact, I did write it for my bride. She inspires a lot of my poetry. I look forward to reading yours.
Date: 11/6/2013 1:58:00 AM
Brilliant piece, flowed golden off the page. Applause
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Date: 11/6/2013 1:08:00 PM
Thank you so much, Sarai. What a lovely comment--as poetic as my rhyme. Very touching to me.
Date: 11/5/2013 6:22:00 AM
just beautiful! i especially love the internal rhyme, which you've done so effortlessly (or so it seems!)
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Date: 11/5/2013 11:59:00 AM
Ilene: I'm so happy you picked it up on the internal rhyme, which no one else has commented on. The style was not listed as an option her on the Soup and took some research to find, i.e., aaab, cccd, eeef,gggf, etc. It's also called chained rhyme. i think the risk is to become mechanical or contrived, so thanks for saying what you did so much!
Date: 11/5/2013 4:19:00 AM
remarkable way to describe the feelings sharp to the point yet soft as a pillow your poems great to read ~V~
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Mark Peterson
Date: 11/5/2013 12:08:00 PM
Wow, a poet for poets. I'm so honored.
Date: 11/4/2013 8:03:00 PM
A beautiful poem!
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Mark Peterson
Date: 11/7/2013 9:52:00 AM
It was fun to write and polish...and polish...and polish...and...
Date: 11/2/2013 8:40:00 PM
wow...this is so perfectly penned and gorgeous poetry....a romantic flare with so much beauty within....excellent write!
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Mark Peterson
Date: 11/2/2013 11:36:00 PM
Sandra: Very much appreciated and great pleasure for me to share. I actually can't write poetry like this; it just arrived this way in a moment from somewhere.
Date: 11/2/2013 8:18:00 PM
wow, I am impressed by your sense of meter. Have you been at Soup very long? I hope to see more of you!! Great poem and so romantic. how nice to just slip away and ditch the world with all its woes.
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Date: 11/3/2013 10:19:00 AM
Join my "archaic" club, Mark! Glad there are still some of us who keep rhyme alive (Andrea included). There needs to be more of us "archaic" types! ;)
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Date: 11/2/2013 11:33:00 PM
Andrea--Thank you so much for the kind words...deeply appreciated. I'm kind of new, I guess. Never dared to share much; everyone in poetry classes said my style was archaic. So nice to hear otherwise.
Date: 11/2/2013 8:16:00 PM
sorry for your wife's loss. It's so sad. Let me read this one now.
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Date: 11/2/2013 12:55:00 PM
This is excellent rhyme my dear friend.The last "As we leave the real world far behind " is so excited for me.Loved it...
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Mark Peterson
Date: 11/2/2013 2:09:00 PM
LItan, thanks for your kind words, received with gratitude. I look forward to reading your verse. Mark
Date: 11/2/2013 11:47:00 AM
Wow. This poem blew my hair back! It's stunningly beautiful and I am whisking it off to my "favorites". You had me from the very first verse. The whole piece is absolutely brilliant. Thanks for sharing this most excellent work. Loved every bit of it; kudos, my friend! :)
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Mark Peterson
Date: 11/2/2013 11:54:00 AM
Thank you SO much. The first stanza came unbidden out of thin air. I had to work hard on the rest and still believe I didn't write it. Much peace and many blessings.
Date: 11/2/2013 11:35:00 AM
Love the poem, love the rhyme, and the meter is perfect. Excellent poem>
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Date: 11/2/2013 11:55:00 AM
Jon. Appreciation beyond words. And thanks to whatever writes my poetry.

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