Darren White Poet Free verse

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Coma

I smile at you
From deep within the folds of consciousness
Where, they say, no recognition does exist
I feel your hands and hear your voice
And smile at you

I see you
While drip drips to moist my burning eyes
There is no vision, nothing to recognize they say
I see your face, observe the glance of sadness
And see you

I hear you
From deep within whirling clouds of mist
Where no sound penetrates they say
I feel your familiar voice resonate in me
And hear you

I am here
Whatever they say is not true, I am here
Do not give up on me and watch me wake
For one day I will look at you and hold your hand
And be here

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Edited and reposted poem 
(c) Copyright Darren White
December 12, 2017

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Aqua Marine July 28, 2018 at 8:59 AM "Do not give up on me and watch me wake..." When I come out of my " poetic coma," which I go into now and again, you are one of those I seek to see...knowing that your poems are so full of life, and being. There is poetry that sits deep within, and keeps me in touch with my reality. Invisible to others, maybe. But never dead and buried. This poem is compassionate, and so caring...(((HUGS)))

Abosede Ogundare January 28, 2018 at 3:07 PM You penned this well.

Connie Marcum Wong January 4, 2018 at 3:26 PM I think this is true. We should always be aware of what we say around coma patients. I believe it is entirely true that they can hear us. Very lovely Darren! I hope you have a wonderful New Year! : )

Eve Roper December 30, 2017 at 8:22 PM Darren, wonderful write. They say that the patient can hear you and I wonder. : ) Hugs eve ~`*

Carole Duet December 24, 2017 at 10:23 PM Amazing, Darren! So deep and insightful and full of emotion. It almost made me cry but I really love this and it will definitely be a FAV for me. And, I hope you have a great New Year. Love to you. Hang in there, dear friend.

White Wolf December 19, 2017 at 10:43 AM Oh, I love this, Duir! I believe most of the population is in a coma-like state. Beautifully done

Connie Marcum Wong December 18, 2017 at 3:04 PM I kind of feel that being in a coma is a little bit like having a near-death experience. I think the body is in a kind of limbo while it is healing and sometimes conscious enough to hear what is going on but not able to respond. This is where I feel energy work really helps to heal the body. Your poem is very beautiful Darren! : )

Stanley Dorsey December 14, 2017 at 4:52 PM Great I enjoyed how you expressed your reaching out from an impairment. Wonder why my coma experience was blank.

Patricia Cresswell December 14, 2017 at 4:19 PM What you say is true Darren. In training we were taught to carry on a conversation with our comatose patients. They also hear people discussing their condition. This poem from the point of view of the comatose person is beautiful and poignant.

Arthur Vaso December 12, 2017 at 10:09 PM I hug you! wonderful poem Darren White December 13, 2017 at 9:08 AM And I hug you!

Sanket Jain December 12, 2017 at 6:35 PM Wow! What a great, pure inspiring work penned by you! Above any review. Excellent and classical poem. Beautiful words used beautifully to add beauty. Review my poems 2 encourage my unique Pari Style. Thanks for being the first person to review on my poem. Darren White December 13, 2017 at 9:08 AM Please don't ask for reviews all the time, thank you :)

Tim Smith December 12, 2017 at 2:26 PM Simply beautiful my friend Darren White December 13, 2017 at 9:09 AM Thanks my friend <3

Mike Gentile December 12, 2017 at 9:16 AM I do so believe this, very well done !!! Darren White December 13, 2017 at 9:09 AM I do too, Mike :)

Sara Ella December 12, 2017 at 8:35 AM Love this one Darren <3 it is a moment that you’ve captured and shared - so eloquently. Darren White December 13, 2017 at 9:10 AM Thanks my friend <3

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 12, 2017 at 8:24 AM This is an exquisite potent penning sweet Piroet. A fave. Hope you are well my friend, big hugs your way <3 Darren White December 13, 2017 at 9:10 AM Thnks ma mo <3

Beautiful Scars December 12, 2017 at 7:13 AM only true love can prevail through sadness or loneliness, I can feel your passion and love so deeply. great poem dear Darren :) luloo Darren White December 13, 2017 at 9:10 AM Thanks so very much Laura :)

Heidi Sands December 12, 2017 at 7:12 AM Very well written Darren :) Darren White December 13, 2017 at 9:11 AM Thanks Heidi :)