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I smile at you From deep within the folds of consciousness Where, they say, no recognition does exist I feel your hands and hear your voice And smile at you I see you While drip drips to moist my burning eyes There is no vision, nothing to recognize they say I see your face, observe the glance of sadness And see you I hear you From deep within whirling clouds of mist Where no sound penetrates they say I feel your familiar voice resonate in me And hear you I am here Whatever they say is not true, I am here Do not give up on me and watch me wake For one day I will look at you and hold your hand And be here *** March 3, 2017 © Darren White
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Date: 3/4/2017 7:14:00 PM
I thinking you will see him again one day and it will be so perfect as you will have so much to share <3
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Darren White
Date: 3/4/2017 10:41:00 PM
Thanks Sara :)
Date: 3/3/2017 2:51:00 PM
Darren this entry is beautiful in every way of theme words layout and presentation. This is what I call the total package. Well done
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Darren White
Date: 3/3/2017 2:57:00 PM
Lisa, I want to thank you. Your comments are so valuable to me!
Date: 3/3/2017 1:03:00 PM
Incredibly powerful writing. I sat in silence for a long time after reading. I truly admire your work!
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Darren White
Date: 3/3/2017 1:07:00 PM
I am honoured, Joshua, for your always wonderful comments.
Date: 3/3/2017 9:52:00 AM
This is so good...he will wait
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Darren White
Date: 3/3/2017 9:55:00 AM
He will, I hope he will :)
Date: 3/3/2017 9:47:00 AM
Really nicely written my friend. I like the format of this poem and the message is always amazing in your work.
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Darren White
Date: 3/3/2017 9:54:00 AM
The repetition here is extremely important, it emphasizes every stanza, which is absolutely necessary. Thank you Chris.
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