Coma

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*Image of Vulnerability by The Conversation.

Coma

Endeavoring eyes opened
to the nothingness ere it.

Harkening labyrinths aches
to the silence yond.

Alone spoke I and
loneliness echoed
in faint whispers.

There remains
a trace of me
airing silently

the breath of
belonging.


Inspired: 2022 March 28
*7th Place*
2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 4
~~Mark Toney: Judged 2022 June 25
*1st Place*
A BRIAN STRAND 1098
~~Brian Strand: Judged 2022 March 30

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/3/2022 11:39:00 AM

Big belated congrats on your win. This is packed with your emotion beautifully expressed.

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/3/2022 12:06:00 PM

Thanks aplenty, Andrea, as I'm posting this mid inundated contacts for 4th's parties. I appreciate you, Happy 4th my friend, Aloha~William

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/26/2022 8:18:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a "Powerful" write/picture. Have a great/blessed day..................

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/26/2022 9:01:00 AM

I am grateful, Paula, for the praise and thoughtful words my friend, Aloha~William

Mark Toney

Date: 6/25/2022 8:47:00 PM

William, your poem was very emotional for me since several family members have experienced comas through the years. Your brevity of expression is very effective. Congratulations on your win on Mile 4 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Mile 5 has already started!

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/26/2022 12:21:00 AM

Mark, an uncle, my mom's cousin-in-law, was my first experience before it had befallen my mom shortly thereafter, hoping she'd have beaten the stats. Thanks for my placement my friend, Aloha~William.