Collapsing Fragments

I am broken;
        decayed lying in a cold tomb-
      Collapsing fragments of raw words spoken
        bestowed much gloom and doom.
  O, I shatter when I dream of angels on high,
  fearing the break down of what I cannot deny.
    I cry with my head to my thigh-
  O, I crumble…falling into tears awoken.



Date written: June 10, 2019
For the contest,   Writing Challenge, June 2019, Crumbling Rhyme 
Sponsor, Dear Heart
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019


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Date: 7/7/2019 4:58:00 PM
Lu Loo, Outstanding! Congratulations on your win! I could feel this so personally. David
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Date: 6/30/2019 3:23:00 PM
Lu, congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this excellent poem and sorry for my delay in visiting ~
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Date: 6/29/2019 12:59:00 PM
beautifully sad Lu Loo congrats on your win I knew Constance would love this the moment I read it :-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 6/25/2019 1:25:00 PM
Collapsing fragments of raw words spoken....this really hit me. The whole poem is heartfelt. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 6/25/2019 11:41:00 AM
yOu chose same theme as I did. I love this, Lu Loo. Congrats on your well deserved win.
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Date: 6/24/2019 8:03:00 PM
Your potent pen delivers such beautifully expressed sad emotions, Lu loo. Congratulations on your excellent win. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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