Jan Allison Poet Alliteration

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Cold Coffee

He slowly sips every drop whilst he dissects the morning news
Coagulating cream congeals in his china cup
Coffee coloured rings form with every sip
If the cup was a tree I could tell its age

Written from observing a local man in our local coffee shop
He sits for hours reading the newspaper for free and makes his coffee last...

08-30-17

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James Inman September 3, 2017 at 7:51 AM Very clever and interesting earthy feel to this write. Jan Allison September 3, 2017 at 10:25 AM I was telling a friend about the poem and she knew who I was talking about without me even breathing a syllable of his name lol:-) hugs jan xx

Christopher Flaherty September 1, 2017 at 5:05 PM I could tell his age by the rings on the cup Savor the moment and the taste You wont burn your mouth Jan Allison September 1, 2017 at 5:14 PM Thanks for dropping by Christopher:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane August 31, 2017 at 10:43 AM Now we know how the rich get richer. I'd rather be a giver than a taker. Nice expose' of this sort of human, Jan. Jan Allison August 31, 2017 at 10:48 AM He's a really meanie Lin:-( hugs jan xx

Klio Tsitsikroni August 31, 2017 at 8:53 AM Very nice Jan. hope that was not his cup?haha Jan Allison August 31, 2017 at 10:49 AM LOL Klio it probably looks much wore than that one lol:-) hugs jan xx

John Lawless August 31, 2017 at 8:41 AM DAMN.....this is good Jan. Really like the Haiku-ish last line. I have a "favorite" coffee cup my grandkids gave me years ago.....it holds many secrets. Jan Allison August 31, 2017 at 10:51 AM I have delighted you liked my poem so much John. i never know what will flow from my pen its usually poop lol:-) hugs jan xx

Ovidiu Bocsa August 31, 2017 at 3:03 AM I am the friend of your local man in your local coffee shop, and like he, I sit for hours reading your lovely poems and tasting from the known coffee: sweet and bitter... Jan Allison August 31, 2017 at 10:52 AM aww thanks Ovidiu I hope the gentleman in question never reads this one he may recognise himself lol:-) hugs jan xx

Carole Duet August 31, 2017 at 12:13 AM I say, "Throw some ice cubes in that coffee and wa-la: ice coffee!" Delicious on a hot day. Neat little poem, Jan. Jan Allison August 31, 2017 at 10:47 AM That's a really cool idea Carole:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Ashley August 30, 2017 at 8:09 PM A very unique and poetic observation. I love your interpretation of this slice of life so excellently expressed. The imagery is awesome, love the last line. A joy to read this evening :) Jan Allison August 31, 2017 at 10:47 AM Thanks so much Susan I was unsure of that final line making sense:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May August 30, 2017 at 7:08 PM Coffee is best served hot...but maybe some like it cold...best wishes. Jan Allison August 30, 2017 at 7:09 PM Thanks Jospeh I much prefer tea and rarely drink coffee:-) hugs jan xx

Chris Green August 30, 2017 at 4:06 PM "Good to the last drop" they say. This was really well written Jan and very creative. I like seeing things through your poetic eyes. Jan Allison August 30, 2017 at 4:20 PM Thanks Chris I never know what is going to flow from my pen and this is definitely different to my usual style:-) hugs jan x

Connie Marcum Wong August 30, 2017 at 3:12 PM I read some of the comments Jan, it is true that's how the rich get rich however it doesn't seem to make them happy. Your poem is brilliant! I loved it! : ) Jan Allison August 30, 2017 at 3:29 PM Aww thanks Connie I was unsure about the final line I am so glad you like the poem:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith August 30, 2017 at 2:12 PM Excellent view Jan...I saw a whole group of seniors savoring their free coffee this morn Jan Allison August 30, 2017 at 3:07 PM This guy is a millionaire Tim but so darn mean !!!:-) hugs jan xx

Vijay Pandit August 30, 2017 at 1:46 PM Good observation--I can see the coffee colored rings--with every sip! Jan Allison August 30, 2017 at 3:07 PM Thanks Vijay:-) hugs jan xx

John Michaels August 30, 2017 at 1:17 PM Awesome alliteration, Jan! Amazing what inspiration can come from people-watching! Regards, John! Jan Allison August 30, 2017 at 1:25 PM Thanks John I wanted to try something a little different . I'm still not too sure of the final line but I'm pleased with the overall effect of the poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish August 30, 2017 at 10:18 AM Just about to go to a book club. Hope the man is nice! Had two cups of green tea today!! I enjoyed it and hope you have a great day! Peace & Love Matthew Anish Jan Allison August 30, 2017 at 12:44 PM Have a fab time at the book club and I too am a green tea fan:-) hugs jan xx

Akkina Downing August 30, 2017 at 9:55 AM Next time just give him cold coffee. Lol! Jan Allison August 30, 2017 at 12:44 PM Akkina that is sheer genius lol !!!:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen August 30, 2017 at 7:53 AM - My coffee must be hot ... he "saves" every drop :))) - Enjoying the free newspaper :))) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison August 30, 2017 at 8:59 AM I'm a tea person Anne-Lise he is welcome to his coffee and free newspaper!:-) hugs jan xx Anne-Lise Andresen August 30, 2017 at 8:55 AM - If I were RICH ... I would buy a cup for you too :))) ... no refill :))) Jan Allison August 30, 2017 at 8:42 AM He is a VERY rich man and goes into the coffee shop with his wife... they sit there and read the papers and don't have a refill... no wonder he is so rich he is so mean!:-0 hugs jan x