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He slowly sips every drop whilst he dissects the morning news Coagulating cream congeals in his china cup Coffee coloured rings form with every sip If the cup was a tree I could tell its age Written from observing a local man in our local coffee shop He sits for hours reading the newspaper for free and makes his coffee last... 08-30-17

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James Inman

Date: 9/3/2017 7:51:00 AM

Very clever and interesting earthy feel to this write.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/3/2017 10:25:00 AM

I was telling a friend about the poem and she knew who I was talking about without me even breathing a syllable of his name lol:-) hugs jan xx

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 9/1/2017 5:05:00 PM

I could tell his age by the rings on the cup Savor the moment and the taste You wont burn your mouth

Jan Allison
Date: 9/1/2017 5:14:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by Christopher:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 8/31/2017 10:43:00 AM

Now we know how the rich get richer. I'd rather be a giver than a taker. Nice expose' of this sort of human, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/31/2017 10:48:00 AM

He's a really meanie Lin:-( hugs jan xx

Klio Tsitsikroni

Date: 8/31/2017 8:53:00 AM

Very nice Jan. hope that was not his cup?haha

Jan Allison
Date: 8/31/2017 10:49:00 AM

LOL Klio it probably looks much wore than that one lol:-) hugs jan xx

John Lawless

Date: 8/31/2017 8:41:00 AM

DAMN.....this is good Jan. Really like the Haiku-ish last line. I have a "favorite" coffee cup my grandkids gave me years ago.....it holds many secrets.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/31/2017 10:51:00 AM

I have delighted you liked my poem so much John. i never know what will flow from my pen its usually poop lol:-) hugs jan xx

Ovidiu Bocsa

Date: 8/31/2017 3:03:00 AM

I am the friend of your local man in your local coffee shop, and like he, I sit for hours reading your lovely poems and tasting from the known coffee: sweet and bitter...

Jan Allison
Date: 8/31/2017 10:52:00 AM

aww thanks Ovidiu I hope the gentleman in question never reads this one he may recognise himself lol:-) hugs jan xx

Carole Duet

Date: 8/31/2017 12:13:00 AM

I say, "Throw some ice cubes in that coffee and wa-la: ice coffee!" Delicious on a hot day. Neat little poem, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/31/2017 10:47:00 AM

That's a really cool idea Carole:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Ashley

Date: 8/30/2017 8:09:00 PM

A very unique and poetic observation. I love your interpretation of this slice of life so excellently expressed. The imagery is awesome, love the last line. A joy to read this evening :)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/31/2017 10:47:00 AM

Thanks so much Susan I was unsure of that final line making sense:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 8/30/2017 7:08:00 PM

Coffee is best served hot...but maybe some like it cold...best wishes.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2017 7:09:00 PM

Thanks Jospeh I much prefer tea and rarely drink coffee:-) hugs jan xx

Niall Fulham

Date: 8/30/2017 6:42:00 PM

Hi Jan , it would be nice to have that spare time , great write my friend ;;)))hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2017 6:45:00 PM

Thanks Niall:-) hugs Jan xx

Chris Green

Date: 8/30/2017 4:06:00 PM

"Good to the last drop" they say. This was really well written Jan and very creative. I like seeing things through your poetic eyes.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2017 4:20:00 PM

Thanks Chris I never know what is going to flow from my pen and this is definitely different to my usual style:-) hugs jan x

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/30/2017 3:12:00 PM

I read some of the comments Jan, it is true that's how the rich get rich however it doesn't seem to make them happy. Your poem is brilliant! I loved it! : )

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2017 3:29:00 PM

Aww thanks Connie I was unsure about the final line I am so glad you like the poem:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 8/30/2017 2:12:00 PM

Excellent view Jan...I saw a whole group of seniors savoring their free coffee this morn

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2017 3:07:00 PM

This guy is a millionaire Tim but so darn mean !!!:-) hugs jan xx

Vijay Pandit

Date: 8/30/2017 1:46:00 PM

Good observation--I can see the coffee colored rings--with every sip!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2017 3:07:00 PM

Thanks Vijay:-) hugs jan xx

John Michaels

Date: 8/30/2017 1:17:00 PM

Awesome alliteration, Jan! Amazing what inspiration can come from people-watching! Regards, John!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2017 1:25:00 PM

Thanks John I wanted to try something a little different . I'm still not too sure of the final line but I'm pleased with the overall effect of the poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish

Date: 8/30/2017 10:18:00 AM

Just about to go to a book club. Hope the man is nice! Had two cups of green tea today!! I enjoyed it and hope you have a great day! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2017 12:44:00 PM

Have a fab time at the book club and I too am a green tea fan:-) hugs jan xx

Akkina Downing

Date: 8/30/2017 9:55:00 AM

Next time just give him cold coffee. Lol!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2017 12:44:00 PM

Akkina that is sheer genius lol !!!:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/30/2017 7:53:00 AM

- My coffee must be hot ... he "saves" every drop :))) - Enjoying the free newspaper :))) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2017 8:59:00 AM

I'm a tea person Anne-Lise he is welcome to his coffee and free newspaper!:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/30/2017 8:55:00 AM

- If I were RICH ... I would buy a cup for you too :))) ... no refill :)))

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2017 8:42:00 AM

He is a VERY rich man and goes into the coffee shop with his wife... they sit there and read the papers and don't have a refill... no wonder he is so rich he is so mean!:-0 hugs jan x