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Clown At the Abyss

he’s close to the edge
wearing his clown suit and shoes
no one's applauding

hiding depression
when the circus comes to town
he paints on his smile

did he mean to fall
or was it an accident ...
didn’t die laughing

Clown at the Abyss Poetry Contest


Sponsor Kai Michael Neumann

3/1/20

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2020

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P.M. Richter Date: 4/1/2020 11:51:00 PM This is so good ~ congratulations on your win! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/2/2020 6:09:00 AM thanks so much PM:-) hugs jan xx

John Watt Date: 3/24/2020 6:12:00 PM Jan, congrats on your high placement in the clown abyss contest. Your ending was especially sad and poignant. Hugs/John Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/24/2020 6:13:00 PM Thanks John it was actually a tough contest to write for:-( hugs jan xx

Kim Rodrigues Date: 3/24/2020 5:38:00 PM Love the accompanying music and pic in this clever clown abyss. Congratulations, Jan! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/24/2020 5:42:00 PM Thanks Kim I am delighted to be on the winner's list:-) hugs Jan xx

Kai Michael Neumann Date: 3/24/2020 1:30:00 PM Congratulations. Marvellous. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/24/2020 5:42:00 PM Thanks Kai it was a great contest prompt thanks for my placement:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 3/24/2020 1:13:00 PM - Back with a congratulations, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/24/2020 1:19:00 PM Thanks Anne-Lise - the figures are rising here now 23 cases, just stay safe my friend:-) hugs Jan xx

J.W. Earnings Date: 3/5/2020 4:40:00 AM Awesome poem! Very whimsical and genius piece. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/24/2020 8:10:00 AM Thanks so much David, hope you are keeping well, its a scary confusing world at the moment - we now have 20 cases of the virus on our little Island but no one has been hospitalised which is the main thing:-( hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues Date: 3/1/2020 8:00:00 PM Great! Love that last verse! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/2/2020 7:44:00 PM Thanks Kim. sadly no one knows what is truly going on 'behind a painted smile'

Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/1/2020 5:12:00 PM I really like how this flowed to that last tragic line, Jan. Great job for Kai. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/1/2020 5:17:00 PM thanks Andrea its a premiere contest so doubt i will place but it was fun writing something a little dark for a change:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 3/1/2020 2:14:00 PM - ... a painted smile ... is a sad fake smile ... give me several meanings .... excellent written, Jan :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/1/2020 2:43:00 PM yes I agree there are several interpretations my friend:-) I am smiling today for you and it's not painted on!!!! hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta Date: 3/1/2020 12:33:00 PM Who could count all the smiles you put on your face during your husband's therapy? Perhaps that is why clowns are so popular, i.e., we all wish we could paint a smile on our face? Best wishes for a win! Aloha! Rico Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/1/2020 12:36:00 PM We have always been positive about his cancer... just learned tonight a friend has been diagnosed with cancer in 3 places I am gutted she only lost her hubby to the vile disease in November ...where is this loving god people worship:-( And I have never liked clowns lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Charles Messina Date: 3/1/2020 7:41:00 AM Great write, Jan. You are right about so many others hiding behind their smiles, and for many reasons...so sad. Best wishes in the contest. Hugs // Charlie x Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/1/2020 7:43:00 AM No one but us truly knows what is going on in our lives I know myself I put on a smile not that I suffer from depression but let's be honest life can be a bitch some days. writing poetry has got me through the toughest times of my life and that is why I try my best to make folk smile:-) hugs Jan xx

Mark Koplin Date: 2/29/2020 8:56:00 PM I like it! Nice cryptic message:) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/1/2020 4:16:00 AM Thanks Mark:-) hugs Jan x