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he’s close to the edge wearing his clown suit and shoes no one's applauding hiding depression when the circus comes to town he paints on his smile did he mean to fall or was it an accident ... didn’t die laughing Clown at the Abyss Poetry Contest Sponsor Kai Michael Neumann 3/1/20

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P.M. Richter

Date: 4/1/2020 11:51:00 PM

This is so good ~ congratulations on your win!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2020 6:09:00 AM

thanks so much PM:-) hugs jan xx

John Watt

Date: 3/24/2020 6:12:00 PM

Jan, congrats on your high placement in the clown abyss contest. Your ending was especially sad and poignant. Hugs/John

Jan Allison
Date: 3/24/2020 6:13:00 PM

Thanks John it was actually a tough contest to write for:-( hugs jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/24/2020 5:38:00 PM

Love the accompanying music and pic in this clever clown abyss. Congratulations, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/24/2020 5:42:00 PM

Thanks Kim I am delighted to be on the winner's list:-) hugs Jan xx

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 3/24/2020 1:30:00 PM

Congratulations. Marvellous.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/24/2020 5:42:00 PM

Thanks Kai it was a great contest prompt thanks for my placement:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/24/2020 1:13:00 PM

- Back with a congratulations, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/24/2020 1:19:00 PM

Thanks Anne-Lise - the figures are rising here now 23 cases, just stay safe my friend:-) hugs Jan xx

J.W. Earnings

Date: 3/5/2020 4:40:00 AM

Awesome poem! Very whimsical and genius piece.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/24/2020 8:10:00 AM

Thanks so much David, hope you are keeping well, its a scary confusing world at the moment - we now have 20 cases of the virus on our little Island but no one has been hospitalised which is the main thing:-( hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/1/2020 8:00:00 PM

Great! Love that last verse!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/2/2020 7:44:00 PM

Thanks Kim. sadly no one knows what is truly going on 'behind a painted smile'

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/1/2020 5:12:00 PM

I really like how this flowed to that last tragic line, Jan. Great job for Kai.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/1/2020 5:17:00 PM

thanks Andrea its a premiere contest so doubt i will place but it was fun writing something a little dark for a change:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/1/2020 2:14:00 PM

- ... a painted smile ... is a sad fake smile ... give me several meanings .... excellent written, Jan :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/1/2020 2:43:00 PM

yes I agree there are several interpretations my friend:-) I am smiling today for you and it's not painted on!!!! hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 3/1/2020 12:33:00 PM

Who could count all the smiles you put on your face during your husband's therapy? Perhaps that is why clowns are so popular, i.e., we all wish we could paint a smile on our face? Best wishes for a win! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 3/1/2020 12:36:00 PM

We have always been positive about his cancer... just learned tonight a friend has been diagnosed with cancer in 3 places I am gutted she only lost her hubby to the vile disease in November ...where is this loving god people worship:-( And I have never liked clowns lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Charles Messina

Date: 3/1/2020 7:41:00 AM

Great write, Jan. You are right about so many others hiding behind their smiles, and for many reasons...so sad. Best wishes in the contest. Hugs // Charlie x

Jan Allison
Date: 3/1/2020 7:43:00 AM

No one but us truly knows what is going on in our lives I know myself I put on a smile not that I suffer from depression but let's be honest life can be a bitch some days. writing poetry has got me through the toughest times of my life and that is why I try my best to make folk smile:-) hugs Jan xx

Mark Koplin

Date: 2/29/2020 8:56:00 PM

I like it! Nice cryptic message:)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/1/2020 4:16:00 AM

Thanks Mark:-) hugs Jan x