Sandra Haight Poet Tanka

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Clocks

Clocks



hearts pounding madly

synchronized hands
 
conducting the measures of time

maestros attempting control

of the endless concerto


© Sandra M. Haight 2015 
   All Rights Reserved


~8th Place~
Contest: Simply This: Top Ten Tanka
Modern Tanka – Syllables 5, 4, 8, 7, 7
Sponsor: Andrea Dietrich
Judged: 03/14/2015




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Charlotte Puddifoot March 17, 2015 at 6:18 AM i read this one before and loved it; it's intricately crafted and clever; it reads very smoothly and the last two lines are particularly good (nice rhyming maestros/control/concerto) i would've placed this one higher for sure - congrats on your win :) Sandra Haight March 17, 2015 at 5:33 PM Thank you so much, Charlotte. I really appreciate your stopping by with your positive and encouraging comments and congrats. Sandra

Skat A March 15, 2015 at 11:57 PM Sandra, CONGRATULATIONS, on your top Tanka win:) ~SKAT~ Sandra Haight March 17, 2015 at 5:34 PM Thank you once again, Skat! Sandra

Reason A. Poteet March 14, 2015 at 8:34 PM Lovely thought in your fourth line -- maestros attempting control. A super metaphor going on here. Well-done Sandra, I agree a top-ten tanka. Sandra Haight March 17, 2015 at 5:34 PM Once again, thank you so much, Reason. I am pleased that you enjoyed my Tanka, and thank you so much for your kind, positive comments. Hugs, Sandra

Eve Roper March 14, 2015 at 7:31 PM Congratulations on your win a very descriptive verse a 7

Sara Kendrick March 14, 2015 at 3:13 PM Congrats on your winning work..Way to go..Sara Sandra Haight March 14, 2015 at 3:17 PM Hi Sara, thank you so much. I appreciate your congratulations and support. Hugs, Sandra

Joseph May March 14, 2015 at 1:46 PM Great write and win Sandra...Congrats Sandra Haight March 14, 2015 at 3:19 PM Thank you, Joseph. I really appreciate your nice comment and congrats. Sandra

Jan Allison March 14, 2015 at 10:51 AM Beautifully penned Sandra many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Sandra Haight March 14, 2015 at 3:19 PM Thank you so much, Jan. Even clocks can't capture time! :( Hugs, Sandra

Andrea Dietrich March 14, 2015 at 9:30 AM This one was a great example of metaphorical tanka, Sandra. I don't know if many of us can be considered maestros in our own lives, but the pounding hearts made me think of people when they are lovers! It is one that makes the reader think. Well done and congrats in my contest. Sandra Haight March 14, 2015 at 10:40 AM Hi Andrea, another of your fine contests I enjoyed participating in. I appreciate that you liked this poem enough for my placement on your limited winner's list. Today's digital clocks seem to be lacking "hearts," like the old-fashioned "tick-tock" of previous analog type, which I reference in my poem. Thanks again, Sandra

Emile Pinet March 9, 2015 at 11:03 AM Your wit is as sharp as the proverbial tack, well done. Emile. #7 Sandra Haight March 9, 2015 at 4:22 PM Thank you again, Emile. Our clocks try their best! :) Sandra