Clarity

This is my first ever attempt at a poem. Hope you like it. Have no idea what to call it. :D

 Clarity

Last breath the man would take.
His time had come, his killer the lake.
Light had shed upon him, 
Vision blur, yet all was clear.
Death shone him his face so slim
None who considered him dear
Late was he for redemption,
Life that described  imperfection.
Death had been blunt
Nothing had he to live for
His last words, a grunt
Begging to die, his insides sour.


An endless fall deep and dark in depth
The man felt helpless, staring at death.
A never ending abyss of nothingness
Still, more preferable than his terrible life of loneliness
Atlas! It was time to meet his holiness
Though in deep water, he still felt his shallowness.


Never had one felt such pain,
Insides with more water than blood,
There was nothing beautiful with the way he was slain,
He wondered if he had ever been loved.
No one would moan for the poor nobody
There would be no claim for his young, able body.
Shame, he had no fight left,
Paralysed and literally out of breath.
He had been caught in humanities net.
Pity, he learned the meaning of life only upon death. 


Death so elite, eternal
Life how short and mortal
Only upon death can life be considered full
For death is what makes life beautiful.


He saw, but never once did he admire,
He tasted, but never once did he savour,
He slept, but never once did he dream, 
He died, but never once did he live


The mans final emotion, a frown,
Oh! What a terrible way to die, to drown.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

Poem

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Anderson Avatar
July 3, 2014 at 10:36 AM
Really enjoyed your poem. Such feelings. Blessings
Deschler Avatar
June 30, 2014 at 10:43 PM
"Though in deep water, he still felt his shallowness." This is a great line!.... It is such a shame to waist a life and never dream, or take the time to see the beauty in it.... Your first poem is an amazing one and very expressive! Welcome to Poetry Soup, Rohan. I look forward to reading more from you!
Antony Avatar
July 8, 2014 at 9:29 AM
Thank you so much Kelly. I look forward to getting to know your work. :)
Thomas Avatar
June 27, 2014 at 11:04 AM
Woah.....unexpected man... Let no talents remain under the bushel huh??? :P Good one..
Antony Avatar
July 8, 2014 at 9:35 AM
Thanks Angie. :P
Gibson Avatar
June 22, 2014 at 1:54 PM
Welcome to Poetry Soup, Rohan. Nice first poem; you are welcome to visit my page anytime. I am glad you discovered this nice community of writers and hope you enjoy the site. Read the work of other poet's and comment if you find something you like; many poets will return the favor. Over time you will get to "know" some of us. Enjoy!
Antony Avatar
June 22, 2014 at 7:34 PM
Thank you Faye. Will pay you a visit sometime :)
Roger  Avatar
June 21, 2014 at 10:46 PM
Hi Rohan, Welcome to PS I believe you will have a wonderful experience here as we enjoy all your poetic art and heart, You are now part of a great family that i believe will be a great blessing .. Hope to follow up all your work ..Your new PS friend RRC
Antony Avatar
June 22, 2014 at 3:02 AM
Thanks a lot. This site is amazing. :)
A   Avatar
June 21, 2014 at 9:42 PM
You will love this community, Rohan.... thank you for the reply...Linda
Andresen Avatar
June 21, 2014 at 7:21 AM
- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup,Rohan :) - I choose your first very well written poem in rhyme - Nice to meet you :) - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- PoetrySoup Rule1: Be kind and keep PoetrySoup a haven. PoetrySoup is a drama free zone(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Antony Avatar
June 22, 2014 at 3:03 AM
Thank you Anne :)
A   Avatar
June 20, 2014 at 6:35 PM
Hi Rohan, this is deep, and is a terrible way to go, well done, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you enjoy the community, as I did when I first join, March 2010. You'll find many friendly poets, who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I want to be the first to invite you on over, to the contest page. I OFFER MY CONTEST, in hopes it inspires you to write another poem. I'm looking forward to following you and your poetry ha-ha a special pair:) here's the link to the contest page. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry_contests/ <---~Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@
Antony Avatar
June 21, 2014 at 2:20 AM
This community is amazing. Thank you Linda. I'll try my luck in the contest. :)
Cornelius  Chidera  Avatar
June 20, 2014 at 6:35 PM
W~elcome to poetrysoup. E~mblem of the best poetry website which gives you; l~ove that comes from richness of her words, c~ourage to harden your faith against writer's block, o~rientation toward being the best bard, m~emories about famous poems and poets. E~mbrace this lovely website ANTHONY. T~his is a caring community o~f all pleasant poems and prettiest poets. P~oet is a bard known for his o~rderly composition of words to e~ncourage love and peace, t~ransparent truth and reality, r~hymes of time and beauty of nature, y~ellowjournalism and comedy. S~oup is what we dissolve our food with. O~ne who dissolve his life in poetry soup will be u~pgraded.Please ANTHONY cook for the world; "p~oetrysoup"
A  Avatar
June 20, 2014 at 12:43 PM
Rohan,,, Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. I will get much delight, in reading and in time become familiar with your verse. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile, others passed, when I first join the soup 4 years ago. I wish you the best when it comes to your compositions. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
Antony Avatar
June 21, 2014 at 2:18 AM
Looking forward to it Skat. Did my first bit just yesterday and I don't know that much about types of poetry. I'll definitely drop in. Thanks :)
Hyler Avatar
June 20, 2014 at 11:21 AM
Thank you for sharing :)
Antony Avatar
June 21, 2014 at 2:15 AM
:)
Get a Premium Membership
Turn off ads, get more exposure for your poetry, and get more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Diverse Voices: The Poetry of Human Rights and the Pursuit of Peace