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City Crawler - Short Version

Early morning, city street, Glancing down around my feet, There, as if upon a trail, Sat a tiny little snail. How he got there, I don’t know; Snails and cities just don’t go. Either he’ll survive or not; I believe he has a shot, Though New Yorkers, I’ll admit, Don’t like creatures slow as _ _ it! (a shorter version of a previous post for Rhyme Battle Contest by Juli-Michelle)

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Date: 3/10/2014 4:43:00 AM
The last line powers this poem. Congratulations, Ilene>>Norma
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Date: 3/9/2014 4:42:00 AM
Congratulations on the fine win. Enjoyed the rhyme perfect, ilene
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Date: 3/9/2014 1:32:00 AM
Congratulations on the ilene... Verlena
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Date: 3/9/2014 1:22:00 AM
enjoyed the energy of this piece, ilene.. best cheers to you and huggs!
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Date: 3/8/2014 9:20:00 PM
A great work indeed,congrats Ilene.
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Date: 3/8/2014 4:33:00 PM
nice win...SKAT
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Date: 3/8/2014 3:35:00 PM
I like the short version :) Great adjustment. Great rhyme. Congratulations on your place win in my contest. You deserve it :) -Juli-Michelle
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Date: 3/4/2014 4:55:00 PM
Pick up the pace just enough to survive. Living like a snail doesn't require alot of drive. You might end up somewhere where your not sure. This endless race of being human for which there is no cure. Peace. :)
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Date: 3/2/2014 12:01:00 PM
good entry!! I remember this one
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