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Citadel of My Heart

she build the walls much higher than before
for she remembered well the sting of pain
her citadel of heart could not take more
the weakened roof let in the acid rain

she fortified the structure with her fears
a mortar of regret on every wall
the open spaces filled with hardened tears
this edifice of strength would never fall

the work complete, she looked with searching eyes
to find a place where one could enter in
should this be found, it would be her demise
she'd fall to Hades from her paradise

The walls all fixed, her heart in good repair
though haunted it would be; no soul lived there

Eileen Manassian

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Shane Cooper Date: 8/2/2015 9:59:00 PM My friend this is a sad sonet. I do think that to build high walls of adament around your heart is going to bring you to paradise, nor do i think it will lessen your pain. To hold no one in your heart but a dark reflection of yourself, is a terrible thing. That path leads to madness. I have put this poem in my favourites because it is beautifully written. Even though so terribly sad. love Shane xxx Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 7/31/2015 12:34:00 AM oh now this is one I missed that is not old at all. It's got excellent sonnet meter, Eileen. Am I missing something? Didn't you use to say meter was hard for you? Or am I mixing you up with someone else, because this is perfect with it! Thanks for telling me my typo, and now I have one for you!! Do you mean built in line one? I think it is so cool we are both teachers and can correct each other!! Login to Reply

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 7/31/2015 12:23:00 AM What a beauty dearest Eileen! U r gem of a poet my friend, keep the golden ink flowing! Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 7/31/2015 12:30:00 AM Thank you, my dear sweet Dr. Upma. God bless you for your kindness to me. Sending you hugs....

Laura Breidenthal Date: 7/30/2015 11:54:00 AM A very haunting, beautiful sonnet here. The second stanza is awesome in particular, though I love every word! The effects of pain are tragic. Strength doesn't always require soul. Always, Laura Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 7/31/2015 12:31:00 AM Thank you, dear, for your visit! You brighten my day with your lovely comments. You are an amazing woman, Laura. Hugs

Kim Merryman Date: 7/30/2015 10:05:00 AM A deeply moving write, Eileen! Your emotions come through loud and clear. Love, Kim Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 7/31/2015 12:32:00 AM Thanks ever so much, Kim. :) You are sweet. Hope to visit you soon!

Anu Nayak Date: 7/30/2015 9:23:00 AM Hello Eileen Manassian, Very deep meaning of pain is shown in your pain....i wish......love gain entry..... A citadel well built... Nice and touching poem, i loved it dear Love n' luck Anulaxmi Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 7/31/2015 12:34:00 AM Thank you Anula, for your visit. Very kind words you've penned here. I will be by to visit you soon.

Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/30/2015 8:59:00 AM Many fortify their hearts and no love is able to pass through that barrier. This is a sad one. Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 7/31/2015 12:29:00 AM Yes....Richard. A heart only has enough place for people who are genuine and true. It doesn't help to be too trusting. Thanks for your visit, dear. You know where your place is.