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Collaboration poem of Space Cadet and Darren White

Wesley C (Space Cadet) and I did a funny exercise together: he wrote a first line, sent it to me, I added a line, sent it to him. Rinse and repeat. After twenty lines we had a silly poem, with spies, paper with hidden messages and all, and then we stopped.

But the first five lines were so beautiful, I just HAD to do something with them. These lines are the first five lines of the poem below. I finished the poem, Wesley added and edited, we both revised some more, and this is the result.

I hope you all like it as much as we both do :)

Darren.

Circles In the Sky - Collaboration With Space Cadet

CIRCLES IN THE SKY


Julie traces circles in the sky;
Wills her finger to connect the lines
So they don't disappear like summer,
Where last sun rays simmer.
I tug at her grass-stained dress;
The hem frills in my fingers.
I watch her write her lines
With serious dedication.
Her bare feet kiss my shins,
Soft scratches of ticklish nails.
A Ladybug begins its journey
Across a bridge of hair.

Julie pulls her dress over her knees;
She shivers against
The moist dew of growing evening
looming shadows,
Of nearby willow trees.
I share my sandwich, lift my glass
To her soft trembling lips:
I build a house of arms and legs.
She makes it home, 
gently puts the Ladybug on a nearby 
Daisy to explore, and I explore her.

Julie traces circles ‘round my eyes,
Wills her finger to connect the line.
Of my frowned brow with intense focus,
We fold the blanket around ourselves
To brush the world aside.
Enfolding us in a cocoon,
Wrapped into a world of us, alone;
while dewing diamonds glisten
in our hair, as thousands of glow worms
find their way back to warmth;
we are lit from within, to shut out
cold Autumn's ending.

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Tim Smith December 18, 2016 at 1:01 PM A great excersise... You're right that beginning is amazing, the rest not shabby either. Darren White December 18, 2016 at 1:04 PM Thanks Tim, I am proud of this poem, so yeah I agree with you. Soon there will be a reading attached to it too, stay tuned :)

Claudia Polydoro December 18, 2016 at 12:03 PM This is such a sweet and loving poem!!! Loved it Darren White December 18, 2016 at 12:54 PM It is, isn't it :) Thanks Claudia <3

Frederic Parker December 18, 2016 at 10:59 AM I wouldn't call it a silly poem you do you and your friend a disservice, it is a very well written poem..well done Darren White December 18, 2016 at 11:10 AM No. This is NOT a silly poem at all :) I explained how this poem, that I love very much, grew out of an exercise that ended silly. That's something different. Thank you for your comment. I am proud of this poem and wouldn't change a word in it.

CayCay Godwin December 18, 2016 at 3:47 AM That was other-than, I was transported and loved it. Divine writing ... CayCay Darren White December 18, 2016 at 6:41 AM Thanks CayCay. It was funny how this poem wrote itself. That's what a few lines and a lot of inspiration suddenly can do...

White Wolf December 18, 2016 at 12:59 AM This is truly great poetry! You guys work very well together! Such talent! Darren White December 18, 2016 at 1:08 AM Thanks Rick, and yes, we certainly do. i love it, and it adds so much fun to what I am doing, plus I learn a lot.