Chum in the Water?

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You came in loud like that was wise— just flung your muddy paws around, all growls and spit and cow-dumb eyes. You came in loud. This isn't turf. It’s neutral ground. Your claws too dull to even fight— the lie you told, that fish can drown. My instrument full-throttle thrives harvests now free range, as wolf-hound altered ego preys the lines. You came in loud. (2)

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Tom Woody

Date: 6/22/2025 3:44:00 PM

Ooh trash talking bears, gotta love it. Personally I think they're just sharing some juicy back slapping gossip but who knows. Cute take

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/22/2025 3:53:00 PM

Haha--maybe I'll change the title? Trash talking bears has a nice ring to it. I like the idea that they're spilling tea instead of guts though. Funny, I couldn't see it any way other than them directly challenging each other until you mentioned the gossip (there's probably a lesson in there somewhere for me...).