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Chrysalis

Chrysalis As healthy relationships go Ours is as fit as a fiddle Peak condition Well fed on truth and Admission Tantrums I’ve thrown each Childish full-blown Cherished by love and Compassion grown From vulnerability Liberty born on The scream of my song Heard as blue bird angels By the heart of my biggest fan This man of mine Cocoon for emergence In it’s early delicate form For him I’ll be me I’ll share who we are as we Love Now, then, ever be.

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Jan Allison

Date: 8/22/2016 7:24:00 AM

A wonderful love poem .. being honest with your partner is the most important thing Fiona - I especially love the second and final stanzas :-) hugs Jan xx7

Fiona Callaghan
Date: 8/22/2016 11:48:00 AM

Honesty can be difficult to bear especially from one you love so dearly but it is as you say the most important thing in a relationship. Thank you for your comments, they encourage me greatly. Hugs to you, Fiona xx

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 4/22/2016 5:48:00 AM

just had a quick look at some of your work, and this is the one that stood out for me; some interesting, effective phrasing, especially in the third stanza...the single best bit of advice i can give is to avoid cliches/familiar sayings such as "fit as a fiddle" wherever possible...i see you're relatively new to writing poetry - definitely keep exploring the free verse, i think it resonates with you

Fiona Callaghan
Date: 4/22/2016 12:30:00 PM

Thanks Charlotte, I really appreciate your feedback. I am very new to writing poetry I only started at the beginning of the year so any guidance or advice from more experienced writers is always welcome.