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Chocolate Girl

Her luxurious penthouse
is like a cocoon with plenty of pretty distractions,
so she keeps her door firmly closed,
because she prefers fantasy
over the handicap of reality.

Afraid of light, 
her malingering mind,
keeps her hidden inside.
To shield her from the sun,
she won't open the curtains,
as she thinks it's certain,
her mechanisms may melt.
Shyness is her veiled excuse
to separate her from society,
But it's the anxiety, anxiety, anxiety!

Preferring to be an option,
rather than a priority
her caution from socialising,
breeds from the alarm bells,
set from abandonment,
betrayal and manipulation.
Trust is her terrorist.

People hunt like packs of wolves,
devouring her mind like a candy snack.
Fears of her heart are like an aeroplane,
shaking from a turbulent storm,
with her hopes forever crashing.

Trying to forget in a flash of courage,
she takes one step towards the door,
but the noises in her head become louder,
and Louder and LOUDER!!!!

repeating, Repeating, REPEATING!

Violent vibrations induce vertigo,
silent screams screw with her sanity,
struggling to breathe, feeling like
air is being sucked out of her lungs,
she vomits, collapsing to the floor.

Nothing can take off the 'edge',
the therapists do not work.
There she remains in her internal prison,
away from her eternal nightmares.
Safe in her sanctuary,
from engagement with stranger's eyes.

Like a chocolate bar 
in her shiny wrapper,
that looks so sweet 
but feels so darkly bitter.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Rolland Avatar
December 14, 2023 at 3:56 PM
chocolate girls are so fragile, this is a splendid metaphor for moving brains, every image talks to me, vibrates, and made me more sensitive to poet condition, what a master piece, thanks poet
Anaya Avatar
December 14, 2023 at 1:50 PM
I feel sympathy for the chocolate girl. A dreadful way to live. She is climbing the walls as they say of her own mind, she will find the answers, and the sweetness missing as well. Everything is for a reason. I feel what you have written, compelling. I wish I had answers. I'm faving this piece Silent One! Sending blessings over in the UK ~Anaya
Iqbal Avatar
December 14, 2023 at 8:25 AM
Perfectly expressed for someone who is suffering from anxiety, more like social anxiety as I felt here.. I felt this piece to my core, though reasons of someone's anxiety can be different ans situation can be different, yet it preys the same on the peace of the one suffering from it. Sad, sad heartbreaking piece.. truly brilliantly inked!!
Empress Avatar
December 14, 2023 at 8:14 AM
You’ve written so well on anxiety, and described exactly how an individual that struggles with anxiety actually feel. Especially how you described that they keep curtains close, too comfortable in the darkness and also how you’ve written “ People hunt like packs of wolves, devouring her mind like a candy snack. Fears of her heart are like an aeroplane,“ you really have a creative way of describing such deep emotions! I love that but every line in this is soul hitting and so powerful! The ending
Empress Avatar
December 14, 2023 at 8:15 AM
Is beyond brilliant how you described “ Like a chocolate bar in her shiny wrapper,that looks so sweet but feels so darkly bitter.” Wow! I love that! And now i need literally some Chocolates . Another fave for me this is
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