Chiselled Forever

Time passes, 
I look in retrospect 
on a life petering out. 
Memories rack my brain, 
there under the pine tree 
we stand embraced 
in perfect harmony, 
our names chiselled 
on the tree's trunk, 
our love in unison 
our passion fulfilled. 
  
Time passes 
like the monotonous tick tock 
of an old wall clock 
rigorous and unrelenting 
obdurate and harsh. 
Our feelings are chiselled 
in a book of love. 
Life's a continuum, 
like a smooth sand dune 
until some heavy breeze 
ruffles the surface, 
then the calm and back  
to the velvety smoothness 
of our devotion and love. 
  
Time passes, 
steadily and pitiless, 
sharing, dividing, consolidating 
all that we had construed,  
until my last entry is there: 
rest in peace my sweet. 
Soon we'll be together again 
as I wane and wither; 
soon our names will be chiselled 
on a flat cold stone 
soon I'll rest too 
forever with my love. 
  


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George Avatar
January 17, 2022 at 12:29 AM
Such a touching and heartfelt poem. I am sure when you wrote this and when you read it over again, your heart gets choked with emotions ! This is a perfect tale of a life in harmony.... ! Wonderful Victor !
Daniel Avatar
September 12, 2021 at 3:33 AM
Oh yeah, sometimes we long for that day, beautifully composed, Victor:)
Edmonds  Avatar
September 7, 2021 at 4:28 PM
A lovely poetic story of your love, you and yours names will remain chiselled on the bark of that tree, a constant reminder of a love that was made for eternity. Wonderful Victor! Hugs, Belle
Andresen Avatar
September 7, 2021 at 11:24 AM
- A beautiful and deep poem, Victor ... the last verse touches me deeply ... your longing ... your love ... - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Seeker Avatar
September 7, 2021 at 6:58 AM
True Victor, together in spirit, body will perish, yet death of form difficult and painful for most of us to accept, unless spiritually evolved. Beautiful poem, really liked your words and sentiment expressed.
Rodrigues Avatar
September 7, 2021 at 6:42 AM
Beautiful and sad ~ hugs
Roper Avatar
September 7, 2021 at 1:43 AM
Beautiful and deep , Victor, great flow.
Lawrence Avatar
September 6, 2021 at 1:22 PM
So intimate..so deep and loving and kind and reflective of love and the passage of time. in perfect harmony, our names chiselled on the tree's trunk, our love in unison our passion fulfilled. So much here in these words. Beautiful Victor ! Blessings, Susan :)
Buehler Avatar
September 6, 2021 at 11:36 AM
From the first verse, and the names chiseled on a tree, to the last, with the promise of love eternally, this poem is touching and beautiful, Victor.
Dietrich Avatar
September 6, 2021 at 8:25 AM
oh my, how beautiful this is. The passing of time and the knowledge you will be again with your loved one!! Thanks, Victor, for your birthday greeting.
Cunningham Avatar
September 6, 2021 at 8:13 AM
We all welcome time passing when we'll be reunited with loved ones who have gone before us. A verse from the heart Victor. Tom
Jayasankar Avatar
September 6, 2021 at 8:08 AM
Awesome write as always dear Victor... "names chiselled on the tree trunk, feelings chiselled in a book of love"...and at last " our names will be chiselled on a flat cold stone.. "... loved it... deep, sad but so impressive... God bless... ~ Ani
Poet Avatar
September 6, 2021 at 6:56 AM
Once again, amazing, Victor. Each stone is a message of gratitude for the life that has been lived. The final verse reminds us of the finality of things, bringing to mind the inevitability of time's passing.
Pandit Avatar
September 6, 2021 at 5:58 AM
Wonderfully scripted the phases of time --each chisel a memento of life's memories. The third stanza, where time passes pitiless, tugs the heart in finality of everything that is life. Excellent as always, Victor.
Rose  Avatar
September 6, 2021 at 3:58 AM
Dear Victor, you can write poetry as easily as melted butter on toast, you melt my heart today, :)
Kannan Avatar
September 6, 2021 at 3:44 AM
So deep but beautiful... Loved the emotions in the last stanza...
Skelly Avatar
September 6, 2021 at 3:03 AM
Victor, this is a perfect bitter sweet poem reflecting on true love...
Omar Avatar
September 5, 2021 at 11:16 PM
perfect harmony
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