Chill Evening Mist

He almost said it, that one sweet word, but a moment lost it would not stay.
He reached for her hand, she lost in thought, pulled it back and looked away.
Was she the beauty he had married young, or an illusion from a fairy's joke?
Would the cold chill of the evening mist be waiting for him when he awoke?

Pain in his head and strain in his heart felt like a clock that was losing time.
Time had opened his eyes and he noticed that the long years had taken away her prime.
"Nothing in common" was too late to say for their paths took a divergent route.
Their anger was quiet and their words were sparse for they had nothing to talk about.

He almost said it, that one mean thing, "Perhaps we should go our separate ways".
He held his tongue, she gave a laugh, saying she'd be gone for at least five days.
He was glad she'd be gone and happier still that he would not have to take all her crap.
But the chill evening mist hanging over his head made him see he was caught in a trap.
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Gifford Avatar
July 7, 2025 at 11:13 AM
Hello Hilda, this is an excellent write. beautifully worded, a great read. So relatable. Sending Blessings your way.
Greenhough Avatar
July 8, 2025 at 5:02 PM
Thank you for reading my poem. Several people have said that they relate to it.
George Avatar
July 3, 2024 at 10:07 PM
This sort of a chill atmosphere hangs heavy in many households among couples. Having nothing to talk about among couples spells the doom of marriage. A beautiful poem, so realistic and probable.
Greenhough Avatar
July 25, 2024 at 7:40 PM
Thank you for your deep delving into this poem of an unhappy relationship. I'm glad you like it.
Baker Avatar
March 28, 2024 at 3:54 PM
Very creative and engaging poetry, Hilda. I enjoyed reading your poetry today. Thanks for sharing your thoughts through your poetry, my friend. I was just going back through the poems of 2024 and found these two I missed. I'm glad I looked back! :-) smiles ~ Blessings Bill
Greenhough Avatar
March 30, 2024 at 4:06 PM
Thank you, Bill.
Volumes Avatar
January 8, 2024 at 9:58 PM
Hilda I know many couples married young and as the years pass it begins to seem their partner has mysteriously been replaced by a stranger, with whom they aren't the slightest bit compatible. It may be hard to stay, but will it be even harder to go ? Your poem is epic and so relatable. Its wonderfully written. Love it.
Greenhough Avatar
January 9, 2024 at 6:55 AM
Thank you. It is unfortunate when a busy life doesn't leave time to account the future.
Romios Avatar
January 8, 2024 at 10:05 AM
Excellebt writem Hiilda, Telationships are all varied, you made this one quite clear! Pangie
Greenhough Avatar
January 8, 2024 at 10:15 AM
Thank you. I'm always uplifted when I hear of the beautiful, perfect marriages. We remain human.
Poet Avatar
January 8, 2024 at 10:04 AM
You have crafted an exquisitely distinctive and captivating poem, Hilda. Its profound nature resonates deeply. It is challenging to empathize with the individual who fails to perceive its beauty, suggesting a need for introspection.
Greenhough Avatar
January 8, 2024 at 10:14 AM
Thank you.
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January 8, 2024 at 7:38 AM
Oh my, this is such a poignant write, dear Hilda.. Your storytelling is absolutely captivating here.. I feel sad for their situation, when love fades and materialistic appearance begins to matter more than inner elegance of the soul.. The feelings don't remain pure, thereafter.. Sigh. This poem evoked so many emotions.. Beautifully crafted, dear.. Sending light and love ~
Greenhough Avatar
January 8, 2024 at 7:51 AM
Thank you for your comment. You can imagine several plots, but for reasons unsaid, he is trapped. Marriage is a contract. Beware.
May Avatar
January 8, 2024 at 1:15 AM
He was in for a surprise, I like the way you crafted this write, outer beauty fades but inner beauty remains
Greenhough Avatar
January 8, 2024 at 7:13 AM
Sometimes we have one or the other or neither. I'm so happy you liked my poem
Empress Avatar
January 8, 2024 at 12:18 AM
Its a situation we often see , stuck in a place where there is no escape from the reality that could hurt both, you do storytelling very well dear hilda. Pleasure reading this poignant and heartfelt poem. I love your rhymes. A fave for me this is
Greenhough Avatar
January 8, 2024 at 7:11 AM
Thank you. Your comment honors me.
Buhagiar Avatar
January 7, 2024 at 11:16 PM
Lost love is so common. Loved the way you almost said it but did not. Will they meet in five days?
Greenhough Avatar
January 8, 2024 at 7:10 AM
Unfortunately, they are married. Yes. Thank you for your comment.
Wolf Avatar
January 7, 2024 at 7:10 PM
Resonant of our times, Hilda. Well done, even if I'd rather it didn't happen as often as it does. Bravo, Gershon
Greenhough Avatar
January 7, 2024 at 7:12 PM
Thank you again for reading my poems. I feel sorry for both of the persons in this poem.
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