Chessman

Confidently he played Cat and mouse across the Chequered board of her heart, Cheating behind her back. Caught in the act, he lay Cowering in defeat: Checkmate...the final move. --------------------------- Contest: Pleiades - C Sponsor: Kim Merryman Placed 1st © 23rd August, 2016

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Doug Vinson

Date: 12/10/2016 9:55:00 PM

7. Just saw this, Paul. So excellent! Cheers, Doug.

Doug Vinson
Date: 12/12/2016 11:35:00 PM

Have to laugh, Paul - there is a current 'Pleiades' contest, and I hacked one out fairly fast; thought it pretty good. Being new to this form, I started looking around at what other people had done, to see what the competition might be like. Then I saw your poem, here, and, "Uh-oh, you're in trouble, Doug." ; )

Paul Callus
Date: 12/11/2016 3:11:00 PM

Thank you for reading and commenting so favourably, Doug. Best regards // paul

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 10/27/2016 3:59:00 PM

Very creative poem, Paul. Interwoven in the chess motif is the treacherous betrayal in a relationship. Great thought provoking art of poetry. It was so rewarding to read ... believe it or not ... I was thinking about writing a poem this morning about chess from my personal experiences. Who would've thunk it that I would read yours today. Ty for sharing. Much love to you. RW

Paul Callus
Date: 12/11/2016 3:10:00 PM

I apologize for the very late reply, Freddie...must have skipped my attention! Thank you for the complimentary remarks. Regards // paul

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

Date: 10/13/2016 10:44:00 AM

Sounds like this guy got what he deserved in the end...serves him right Ha! Congratulations on winning with this very creative poem! Nice work MC

Paul Callus
Date: 10/14/2016 8:11:00 AM

Thank you, MC. Pleased that you found this to your liking! My muse does come out with some creative ideas sometimes...surprises me, too:) Regards // paul

Keith Logan

Date: 9/14/2016 2:21:00 AM

I was only going to give this a 6 but my cursor was jumping about and I thought it not worth altering. I really like this. I noticed the lines all began with c and thought what a neat idea but I now see that was set by a contest. This deserves to be a winner in my book.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/21/2016 4:17:00 AM

Hi Keith, thank you for stopping by; pleased that you liked this Pleiades. [Excuse the late reply, but I thought that I had already sent one!] Regards // paul

Caycay Jennings

Date: 8/26/2016 5:03:00 PM

Well, you haven't rocked YET, but I found this gem to enjoy! Very clever and profound, plus I offer you my sincere congrats - the number one feels good, eh? Yepper ... CayCay

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 5:20:00 PM

No rock n' roll as yet, CayCay...maybe tomorrow after a good night's rest:) Glad you found and enjoyed this poem...no1s do not come on a daily basis! Goodnight (here it's 12.20am) even though it's still too early for your bedtime:) // paul

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 8/26/2016 7:55:00 AM

A brilliant piece!! Congrats Paul, for your top placement in the contest!! ;-)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 4:02:00 PM

Glad you liked it, Teddy! Thank you:) Regards // paul

Afzal Nusker

Date: 8/26/2016 4:58:00 AM

Congratulations on your fine win, Paul. Very well deserved.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 3:47:00 PM

Thank you, Afzal; pleased with your first visit to my page. Regards // paul

Gary Bateman

Date: 8/26/2016 3:57:00 AM

Hello Paul, Excellent Verse my good friend!! Congratulations on POTD and for the top place in the contest!! (I like the technique here of starting each verse with a word beginning with the Letter "C.") Cheers and Best, Gary

Gary Bateman
Date: 8/29/2016 7:36:00 AM

I read this one again Paul. All I can say is: "Bravo." The work of a true poetic craftsman!! Best, Gary

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 3:40:00 PM

Many thanks, Gary; always a pleasure to receive your feedback! Your latest collab poem still lingers in my mind! Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/26/2016 3:52:00 AM

- Congratulations on your winning poems, Paul :) - hugs and :)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 3:14:00 PM

Thank you Anne Lise:) Best regards, hugs and smiles:)) Enjoy the weekend. // paul

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 8/26/2016 3:01:00 AM

Wow. That is an awesome picture. I never thought of defeat and cheating in that sense. Congratulations. Kai

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 3:24:00 PM

I truly appreciate your lovely feedback, Kai. Thank you for stopping by; pleased to make your acquaintance. Regards // paul

Viv Wigley

Date: 8/26/2016 12:26:00 AM

...and , as predicted, a worthy topster, Paul. Congratulations! Regards, Viv

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 3:10:00 PM

You make a good judge, Viv:) Thank you for the repeat visit. Regards // paul

Carole Duet

Date: 8/25/2016 11:04:00 PM

Short and sweet! And to the point!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 3:09:00 PM

So is your welcome comment, Carole:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/25/2016 9:29:00 PM

Hi Paul, Congratulations on getting the poem of the day.It was well deserved. Enjoy the honor:-)Alexis

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 3:08:00 PM

Thank you, Alexis:) I will...it's not an everyday occurrence!! Enjoy the weekend:) Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/25/2016 9:10:00 PM

Yay!!!! Right where it belongs Paul...on top! Congratulations on your well deserved win! I am very happy for you. 7 ; )

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 2:46:00 PM

Aww you are too kind, Connie:) Your continued support and encouragement are much appreciated:) Have a lovely weekend. Regards // paul

Sandra Haight

Date: 8/25/2016 6:24:00 PM

Paul, congratulations on your First Place win in the 'Pleiades C' contest! Wow...such a powerful tragic story in so few words! Sandra

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 2:44:00 PM

Thank you for the congrats and lovely comments, Sandra! So pleased that you found it to your liking. Warm regards // paul

Joseph May

Date: 8/25/2016 5:15:00 PM

Congrats on your top win Paul...

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 2:42:00 PM

Thank you, Joseph. All the best...paul

Lu Loo

Date: 8/25/2016 5:11:00 PM

Paul! congrats on this remarkable poem dear friend! I have said it before..you are so sweet to me and many others, I thank you kindly for all your sweet comments and continued support! Congrats and I am also proud to share the top spot with you dear man...:)-luloo

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2016 2:41:00 PM

Many thanks Laura...you are too kind:) I loved your winning poem right from the start...it had that winning glow to it:) ~ Have a lovely weekend. Regards // paul