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Chariot Riders

Last night, i dared revisit the crossing of time with my brother, hovering on a distant sky , tracing notes of my dripping rhymes. We grew like chariot riders; he, the Troy of streets and I, the maiden of lofty speeches. While his hands reveled at the wonder of seaweeds, I reviewed the fury of ancient mythology--- he laughs again at the strangeness of my ivory tower ; and above easels of clouds, he smiles knowing only he could comprehend my weird attachment to words, art, and tempest. Ten years ago, he ascended somewhere in the glow of light, shutting me from all moments uninhabited… unleashed. A blank paper shouts at my hesitating litany as if it were aware how siblings climb inside, touch the veins of bloodline… yet, it can not. Like a pageless odyssey, I close my seaweed eyes unable to continue recounting that June day, when Benjo slipped into chariot’s final ride without nothing else to say. © *in sweet memory of my brother who relished my uniqueness as a person and inspired me to pursue my passion. Carol Eastman's Unsung Hero Contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 8/6/2014 9:39:00 PM
Nette, Congratulations, In Carol's Unsung Hero Contest. LINDA
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Date: 8/2/2014 6:52:00 AM
Aww that is beyond beautiful, well done Nette :)
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Date: 8/1/2014 5:27:00 AM
Nice recollection and a fine tribute to your brother, nette. congrats on the win
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Date: 7/31/2014 6:16:00 PM
wonderful tribute to your brother and well done on your win Hugs jan xxx
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Date: 7/31/2014 5:43:00 PM
Tremendous tribute. Excellent write Nette, invites all on the Chariot Ride. Well Done.
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Date: 7/31/2014 3:19:00 PM
Hi Nette: A beautifulwell written poem in tribute to your brother.
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Date: 6/2/2012 8:33:00 PM
Nette, a wonderful congratulations in JOANN'S beautiful "Memories of June" contest~ :-) PD
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Date: 6/2/2012 5:44:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Nette. I am touched by your beautiful tribute to your brother. My tears fall from your expression of love. I have a brother who isn't speaking to me. Everyday that goes by is sad knowing life is fragile and short on this earth. Your poem has reminded me of my love for my own brother and all of my precious memories. God bless you. Love and Blessings, Rhonda
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Date: 6/2/2012 4:51:00 PM
Wow! you have a ay to make words and verse transend beyond themselves. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 6/2/2012 9:47:00 AM
Yeahhh...Nette congrats on your 1st place win with this wonderful write!!
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Date: 6/1/2012 6:41:00 PM
Congrats, nette. Awesome. Well deserved 1st place. Kudos. hugs, Ralph
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Date: 6/1/2012 2:58:00 PM
Such a beautiful, and touching tribute, Nette! A very moving poem...as you said, an odyssey of emotion.
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Date: 6/1/2012 1:27:00 PM
Nette, congrats on your win..David
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Date: 6/1/2012 1:01:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in the "Memories of June" contest Nette. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/1/2012 6:06:00 AM
Wow, Nette. This is powerful stuff. I'm kinda speechless...congrats!
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Date: 5/31/2012 6:47:00 PM
This is another poem that made me cry inside. Simply beuatiful. Congratulations.
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Date: 5/22/2012 2:33:00 PM
Sounds like your brother was close to your age, I mean the sharing, the understanding. Your usual outstanding write. Love, daver
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Date: 5/21/2012 9:42:00 PM
oh wow, this is sad but so awesome to read, Nette. I actually was thinking it was for the contest on what is at heaven's gate! You could kind of do it for that one as well.
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Date: 5/21/2012 8:45:00 AM
sorry to read about the loss, nette, but you recount it all in your unique style, Jag
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Date: 5/21/2012 8:32:00 AM
What a testament to your brother! This is a beautiful poem my friend! Your words speak of kindness and wonderment! This is a grandiose and remarkable write Nette! I just love your poem immensely! Great Work!!
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Date: 5/21/2012 7:32:00 AM
Deep,sorry for your lost...
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Date: 5/21/2012 7:31:00 AM
Nette, a loving write, best of luck..David
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Date: 5/21/2012 7:07:00 AM
Sad time to remember but pleasant to remember his life and your relationship..Reads like he was your hero..Enjoyed reading this sure winner..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for stopping by, reading and commenting on my work..Sara
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