Chariot Riders

 Last night, i dared revisit the crossing
of time with my brother, hovering on a
distant sky , tracing notes of my dripping rhymes.

We grew like chariot riders; he, the Troy of
streets and I, the maiden of lofty speeches.
While his hands reveled at the wonder of seaweeds,
I reviewed the fury of ancient mythology---
he laughs again at the strangeness of my ivory
tower ; and above easels of clouds, he smiles
knowing only he could comprehend my weird
attachment to words, art, and tempest.

Ten years ago, he ascended somewhere
in the glow of light, shutting me from all
moments uninhabited… unleashed.
A blank paper shouts at my hesitating
litany as if it were aware how siblings
climb inside, touch the veins of  bloodline… 
yet, it can not. Like a pageless odyssey, 
I close my seaweed eyes unable to continue 
recounting  that June day,

when Benjo slipped into chariot’s final ride
without nothing else to say.



©


*in sweet memory of my brother who
relished my uniqueness as a person 
and inspired me to pursue my passion.

Carol Eastman's Unsung Hero Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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A   Avatar
August 6, 2014 at 9:39 PM
Nette, Congratulations, In Carol's Unsung Hero Contest. LINDA
Nance Avatar
August 2, 2014 at 6:52 AM
Aww that is beyond beautiful, well done Nette :)
Mehta Avatar
August 1, 2014 at 5:27 AM
Nice recollection and a fine tribute to your brother, nette. congrats on the win
Allison Avatar
July 31, 2014 at 6:16 PM
wonderful tribute to your brother and well done on your win Hugs jan xxx
Lawless Avatar
July 31, 2014 at 5:43 PM
Tremendous tribute. Excellent write Nette, invites all on the Chariot Ride. Well Done.
Sergi Avatar
July 31, 2014 at 3:19 PM
Hi Nette: A beautifulwell written poem in tribute to your brother.
A   Avatar
June 2, 2012 at 8:33 PM
Nette, a wonderful congratulations in JOANN'S beautiful "Memories of June" contest~ :-) PD
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June 2, 2012 at 5:44 PM
Congrats on your win, Nette. I am touched by your beautiful tribute to your brother. My tears fall from your expression of love. I have a brother who isn't speaking to me. Everyday that goes by is sad knowing life is fragile and short on this earth. Your poem has reminded me of my love for my own brother and all of my precious memories. God bless you. Love and Blessings, Rhonda
Smith Avatar
June 2, 2012 at 4:51 PM
Wow! you have a ay to make words and verse transend beyond themselves. Congrats on your win.
Poet Avatar
June 2, 2012 at 9:47 AM
Yeahhh...Nette congrats on your 1st place win with this wonderful write!!
Taylor Avatar
June 1, 2012 at 6:41 PM
Congrats, nette. Awesome. Well deserved 1st place. Kudos. hugs, Ralph
Richards Avatar
June 1, 2012 at 2:58 PM
Such a beautiful, and touching tribute, Nette! A very moving poem...as you said, an odyssey of emotion.
Williams Avatar
June 1, 2012 at 1:27 PM
Nette, congrats on your win..David
Brown Avatar
June 1, 2012 at 1:01 PM
Congratulations on your win in the "Memories of June" contest Nette. Love, Carol
Hunter Avatar
June 1, 2012 at 6:06 AM
Wow, Nette. This is powerful stuff. I'm kinda speechless...congrats!
Grisetti Avatar
May 31, 2012 at 6:47 PM
This is another poem that made me cry inside. Simply beuatiful. Congratulations.
Austin Avatar
May 22, 2012 at 2:33 PM
Sounds like your brother was close to your age, I mean the sharing, the understanding. Your usual outstanding write. Love, daver
Dietrich Avatar
May 21, 2012 at 9:42 PM
oh wow, this is sad but so awesome to read, Nette. I actually was thinking it was for the contest on what is at heaven's gate! You could kind of do it for that one as well.
Nair Avatar
May 21, 2012 at 8:45 AM
sorry to read about the loss, nette, but you recount it all in your unique style, Jag
Sivey Avatar
May 21, 2012 at 8:32 AM
What a testament to your brother! This is a beautiful poem my friend! Your words speak of kindness and wonderment! This is a grandiose and remarkable write Nette! I just love your poem immensely! Great Work!!
Palmer Avatar
May 21, 2012 at 7:32 AM
Deep,sorry for your lost...
Williams Avatar
May 21, 2012 at 7:31 AM
Nette, a loving write, best of luck..David
Kendrick Avatar
May 21, 2012 at 7:07 AM
Sad time to remember but pleasant to remember his life and your relationship..Reads like he was your hero..Enjoyed reading this sure winner..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for stopping by, reading and commenting on my work..Sara
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