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Chariot of Fire: Co-Written With Oe Guillermo

I stand in silence and behold the sight,
     staring in wonder, waiting for thunder.
     A chariot of fire travels through the night.

     The white-winged horses gallop in full flight 	
     pulling at the reins; flowing are their manes.
     I stand in silence and behold the sight.

     Where are they going? There’s a shining light
     leading all the way, so they will not stray.
     A chariot of fire travels through the night
 
     amidst the heaven where in pure delight
     resides the Master, the sweetest lover. 
     I stand in silence and behold the sight.

     Blessings whisked to amble slowly with plight;
     heartbeats race to sway, courage on display.
     A chariot of fire travels through the night.

     Armoured by God’s spirit they ride like knights
     fearless from pain; victory, their peak gain.
     I stand in silence and behold the sight.
     A chariot of fire travels through the night.


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Collaboration: Paul Callus & Olive Eloisa Guillermo
                       November 2014

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Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/20/2014 2:47:00 PM

...and a Villanelle no less. Wow colabs are a challenge as it is but to choose a challenging form as well...wow again you two did amazing!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/21/2014 1:51:00 PM

Thank you Maurice. I know that Olive would never run away from a challenge, so I took pleasure in offering her this one, throwing in internal rhyme for good measure. Glad you enjoyed! // paul

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 11/20/2014 10:16:00 AM

I am " in pure delight". Music reverberates. A good poem always cleanses heart like this one.I have got enough soulfood to go around. Love to you and Olive . She is so powerful. I can't fathom the depth of her poetic insight. She is sweet and wonderful. Take care XXXX RAJAT

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/20/2014 3:47:00 PM

thanks so much I am all humbled with what you just said .. :) i shallm continue writing .. :) thanks much

Paul Callus
Date: 11/20/2014 11:22:00 AM

So glad you've been touched, Rajat! Many thanks for your comments. Yes, Olive is one of a kind...a natural! // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/20/2014 8:54:00 AM

- A truly wonderful poem from you both! - ( 7 !!!! ) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/20/2014 9:35:00 AM

Many thanks Anne Lise!:) I have just been reading and enjoying your co-write with Liam! /x/ paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 11/20/2014 5:27:00 AM

Paul thanks much for trusting me... :)!!!! will treat you for a tea?! healthy. :D

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/21/2014 8:14:00 AM

haaha am excited with those mince pies.. :D!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/20/2014 9:19:00 AM

Awww Olive_eloi!! How could I not trust you, of all people!:)) I know that I always get something in return:))....tea will be fine...I'll bring the mince pies. :D hugs paul

David Meade

Date: 11/19/2014 10:09:00 PM

I loved the whole poem -- This is my third time reading and it won't be the last. Great job!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/20/2014 9:33:00 AM

That is so good of you David! Your comments are encouraging...and appreciated. // paul

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 11/19/2014 7:01:00 PM

I just love the thoughts of Chariots of fire, and I just love this poem. The two of you did magnificent.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/20/2014 9:31:00 AM

Double thanks Brenda, from both of us! Thank you for reading and letting us know you enjoyed it! // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 11/19/2014 6:52:00 PM

WOW I can hear the chariots of fire theme in my head simply from the title - what an awesome write with fabulous imagery - weel done Paul and olive:-) Hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 11/20/2014 9:30:00 AM

So pleased that you enjoyed, Jan. Thank you! Olive will surely like your comments. :) hugs // paul

Paul Callus

Date: 11/19/2014 6:17:00 PM

Dear Olive_eloi.....thank you for co-writing this poem with me. I know I was somewhat hard on you, asking for internal rhyme in mid stanza, as an extra challenge, but you did not shy away! Bless you and many thanks for the fun:) No whippings this time!:)) hugs // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/19/2014 7:41:00 PM

not so hard.. :D!!! :P well, next time we'll make it easier.. :D :P wink! ;) hahahhahaha! you believe?

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/19/2014 7:38:00 PM

:D well.. I love the in between challenges.. !! you know very well that I can say no to such it makes me all the more interested... :) plus the background of this wow!!! :) thanks much .. :D you granted my wish .. :D!