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Chants Of The Palm Fruit Eaters--CM I ate the palm fruits midst, my folks, Delight in sounds we made. The gourd chants to our ancestors, It binds our souls with theirs. I delight, despite echoes, bounce, Midst, the palm fruits, eats I. Of gourd chants to our ancestors, Sits quietude, but I. “… an alien life, a life unlived, not lively, hardly ours.” ***In the 60's, full-blooded Hawaiians numbered under 2,000--I venture naught, what our numbers are today, but I am the last survivor of 4 bloodlines. The impetus of my return to Hawaii, leaving my family in the States, to be with my buried descendants. 2019 August 23 *1st Place* CHOOSE AN OCTAVIO PAZ LINE ~~nette onclaud

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Eve Roper

Date: 8/31/2019 10:53:00 PM

Beautiful verse, William, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/31/2019 10:58:00 PM

Thank you Eve for the read and niceties, ~ Aloha William

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/30/2019 5:02:00 PM

BIG congratulations on your top win, William. I can tell your pride in your heritage. I can hardly believe that number of only 2,000!! I had no idea it was so low. And to think, that was in the 1960's!!

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/30/2019 5:23:00 PM

Plight was dwindling in the realm of available choices the catalyst whereto, many abandon necessities in pursuit of love, ergo, I'm a testament of the breakaway, a family's last survivor who tends to their resting places--plans of a mausoleum constructed on the grounds of my home in Hawaii--much heartfelt aloha Andrea ~ Aloha always William

Paul Callus

Date: 8/30/2019 7:24:00 AM

An expressive poem which takes the author to his roots, where imagery and sounds combine to set an atmosphere one could be proud of. Congratulations on placing first, William. // paul

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/30/2019 7:29:00 AM

With heartfelt Aloha for your comment in support of my strive for the betterment of my rich heritage ~ Aloha always William

Sandra Adams

Date: 8/30/2019 5:39:00 AM

Wow nicely penned. Congrats on your first place win :)

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/30/2019 5:47:00 AM

A simple form to stress a point -- my thanks for your support Sandy ~ Aloha William

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/30/2019 12:07:00 AM

enjoyed the deep, historical slant of your piece.. i may not be too fond of many repetitive words, but in this case, it really worked to build euphony within this poem... warm congrats on your top win, william , and thanks for penning this for my contest

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/30/2019 12:19:00 AM

I just had dinner here in Hawaii, not expecting dessert via email--but WOW Nette, much Aloha and heartfelt thanks ~ William

Jan Allison

Date: 8/23/2019 5:52:00 PM

A thought provoking poem and an excellent interpretation of the quote and i love the impact of the repeated line, Your poets notes made me so sad but also so proud you have gone back to your roots :-) hugs Jan xx

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/24/2019 2:11:00 AM

I am very humbled by the contents of your every word, Bless your soul ~ William