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Changing Probabilities

one life has ended
a spirit caste to the wind
watch the dragon-fly

For Marvin Celestial's Haiku Contest.
Written August 3rd, 2014.

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Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 1/15/2015 7:27:00 AM

Celestial haiku moment Richard>>>rajat

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/15/2015 8:11:00 AM

Thanks Rajat.

Darlene Gifford

Date: 9/18/2014 11:09:00 AM

Rich imagery and heartfelt. One life here ends while another begins.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/19/2014 8:29:00 AM

Thanks Darlene.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/11/2014 8:18:00 AM

Deep n thoughtful haiku Richard! Congrats on fine win!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/10/2014 6:58:00 PM

Thanks for all the thoughtful posts, I am a little short on time so I can't respond to each of your kind visits. Hugs Rick.

Tim Smith

Date: 8/10/2014 6:53:00 PM

Congrats Richard.... Cheers

Mohan Chutani

Date: 8/9/2014 11:05:00 AM

a deep one, Richard. Congrats.

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 8/9/2014 9:47:00 AM

Congratulations, Richard, on your wonderful win. I enjoyed reading this beautiful haiku. Excellent write! Pandita

Casarah Nance

Date: 8/9/2014 9:36:00 AM

back again sweetie to grats your win :) I enjoyed this one a lot. You are awesome ;)

Paul Callus

Date: 8/9/2014 9:28:00 AM

This is a haiku that becomes rich once we delve into it with awareness. The 'caste' is a pivotal word that acts as a hub for thought. Congrats, Richard. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma
Date: 8/11/2014 8:17:00 AM

Love ur thoughtful comments Paul !

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/8/2014 10:01:00 PM

Amazing haiku on life, Richard. congrats

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/8/2014 8:37:00 PM

I like this one my friend. Congrats on your win!!

D.W. Rodgers

Date: 8/8/2014 7:53:00 PM

Well done Richard, my inner entomologist applauds

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/8/2014 7:55:00 PM

Thanks Dave

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/8/2014 7:07:00 PM

very clever how that ending has two possible meanings!!! I really like this. congrats.

Abdul Malik

Date: 8/8/2014 6:46:00 PM

"dragon-fly?" Probably!

Jan Allison

Date: 8/8/2014 6:39:00 PM

congrats on a great win Richard :-) Hugs Jan xxx

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 8/4/2014 7:43:00 PM

a charming poem Rick gl in contest hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/4/2014 8:02:00 PM

Thanks Shadow, it's nice to have you back. Has life slowed down a bit?

Harry Horsman

Date: 8/4/2014 3:44:00 PM

like this so much Richard,,truly gives the reader, many possibilities...like the reincarnation aspect..

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/4/2014 7:09:00 PM

Hi Harry, I havn't dropped by in a while. I think I should rectify that right now. Thanks for the visit.

Casarah Nance

Date: 8/4/2014 10:29:00 AM

I had to look up that word Caste, I thought you made an error, but now it gives it a whole new meaning and I am even more impressed. Well done!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/4/2014 7:07:00 PM

Thanks for exploring beyond the surface Casarah.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/4/2014 8:31:00 AM

Interesting...so very different. I was wondering if you really meant caste. Not what you believe in, but interesting for the contest.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/4/2014 9:06:00 AM

You are right, it is a play on words that fit for the purpose of this write.

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 8/3/2014 8:33:00 PM

What probabilities Rick... Enjoyed... Verlena

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/4/2014 7:53:00 AM

His new life as a dragonfly creates a series of new probabilities that did not exist when he was in his previous Caste as a man. His actions in his previous life created the probability that he would become less than he had been. I do not believe in the Caste system but it came to mind for this poetic challange and it speaks to choices we make and the probabilities that change as a result of our choices.

Justin Bordner

Date: 8/3/2014 7:04:00 PM

Karma is my Allie Richard, a force of justice, a teacher. Dragons are beautiful, and in most cultures a great symbol of strength and wisdom. I like the metamorphosis feel in this write. J.A.B.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/4/2014 7:57:00 AM

Thanks Justin, my allie, friend, teacher, Savior and God is my Lord Jesus. I am pleased you enjoyed this piece.

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