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There is a sombre silence, as mist veils morning air. A plethora of feathers float among dew drops. A ceremony of birds, heads slumping, soundless and homeless, perch upon rooftops, observing fallen nests, cracked eggs and lifeless nestlings. Arrival of their fate is like paper in a storm. But birds don't ask why, they just spread their wings and fly.

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Lisa Ricci

Date: 1/20/2024 8:23:00 AM

Hello Silent. Good Morning. Yes, ceremony is right. Every aspect of this entry is poetry and poetic. Your title your word choices your beautiful theme who could argue with that (no one) the imagery you leave us with and yes the beautiful thought and image of flying away with freedom and more. This is a little gem. Thank you as always for sharing your skilled poetic talent. May this day find you well. Peace and Blessings always. (smile)

Kelli White

Date: 12/19/2023 8:12:00 PM

I love this, SO, happy holidays,Kelli

Mike Gentile

Date: 12/15/2023 4:32:00 AM

They are so wise to not ask why Silent One! Your contemplative piece is sad and sweet! Its sombre notes read to the ear like a symphony! You are truly one of a kind! Happy Weekend!

Anitha Jayasankar

Date: 12/14/2023 11:20:00 PM

What a meaningful write S1... I too have seen cracked eggs of pigeons in our window sill outside, while I used wait patiently to see them hatch... but for birds, as you said "arrival of fate is like paper in a storm".. "they just spread their wings and fly"... so true and insightful...God bless... ~ Ani

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 12/14/2023 6:03:00 PM

Silent One, your poem about birds is a beautiful and evocative piece that captures the essence of nature’s beauty and the power of life. Your use of imagery and emotions conveyed through the words are truly captivating and heartwarming. Your poem is a testament to the beauty of birds and their resilience in the face of adversity. - Blessings, Daniel!

Judy Ball

Date: 12/14/2023 5:12:00 PM

We change what we can and accept what we cannot change. Well done Silent One. God Bless and Merry Christmas, JB

Yann Rolland

Date: 12/14/2023 4:11:00 PM

wonderful inspiration, birds thank you poet yann

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 12/14/2023 3:57:00 PM

Ah, love those last two lines, they never ask why, they just fly, wish it was easier to get ourselves off the ground sometimes, lol, nice one Silent One the photo is stunning, do you happen to know who photographed it ? I want to share it on a photography site and want to give the person credit

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 12/14/2023 3:05:00 PM

Wonderful poem! A favorite!

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/14/2023 2:58:00 PM

How inspirational your words were. You've aptly described the birds I see on early winter mornings perched, slumping to avoid the bitter winds. What a beautiful metaphor for we humans who, when faced with winter mornings, must do as birds do...not ask why just spread their wings and fly... Magnificent, Silent One! Faving this one, Sar a

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/14/2023 1:53:00 PM

"There is a somber silence, as mist veils morning air. A plethora of feathers float among dew drops" The flow of staggering creativity is obvious. Only those with unwavering resolution can prevail in the face of hardship. Your skillful conveying of this message is excellent! Further, the final two lines deftly shift our gaze, instilling us with a renewed sense of purpose.

Heidi Sands

Date: 12/14/2023 1:37:00 PM

I love this poem . Perfect ending too. A Fave for me :)

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 12/14/2023 12:47:00 PM

Much sadness in this powerful write Silent One Nature can be very cruel then you switch over to give us hope. your last 2 lines turn things around giving us a renewed sense of purpose hugs Shadow

Regina Elliott

Date: 12/14/2023 11:53:00 AM

Hello Silent One, I love birds and am deeply saddened when harm comes to any of them. We've made our backyard a bird sanctuary. We enjoy watching them go into the bird apartment house in the spring to build their nests. Sadly beautiful bird poem, a fine write. ~

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/14/2023 10:48:00 AM

But birds don't ask why, they just spread their wings and fly---much inspiration you convey, SO. When times are hard only the determined survive. A message well delivered!

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 12/14/2023 8:41:00 AM

Something to learn here …

Ayesha Iqbal

Date: 12/14/2023 8:30:00 AM

Ahh I love the intense melancholic vibes here.. I don't know why I felt it so befitting for current situation of the world and reminded me of war and people being forced to leave their homes and land.. sigh it made my heart too heavy! Thank you so much for sharing this powerful piece brother!!

Ink Empress

Date: 12/14/2023 8:09:00 AM

Wow that last line is beautiful! And so meaningful. Birds dont ask why they just spread their wings and fly… i love the flow of imagery in this and the way you’ve played around with words is beyond exquisite. Especially “ as mist veils morning air.A plethora of feathers“ love that! Your choice of words and descriptive nature of lines. “ observing fallen nests, cracked eggs and lifeless nestlings.” I can literally see through your profound lines! How artistic. This will be perfect for brians-

Ink Empress
Date: 12/14/2023 8:10:00 AM

Maybe you should enter? I love how you write free verse in so many different ways. Impeccable! Pleasure reading you always. Another fave