Castle On a Hill

There was a castle on a hill
It only took hours to build
Buckets and buckets of sand
Two pairs of children's hands

A vacant high spot on the beach
Just out of the low tides reach
Two kids, plastic shovels and pails
Construct a castle minus hammers and nails

The ground floor must be the driest
As water seeps down from the highest
A little shovelful here and there
Customized architectural repairs

A spectacular four story sight
The envy of Frank Lloyd Wright
Onlookers and passers by
Give congratulatory high fives

There's not much time to gloat
Changing tide is filling the moat
Once the water spills over the side
The sand will swim out with the tide


    an original poem by Daniel Turner
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Salehi Avatar
June 9, 2016 at 6:22 PM
Beautiful Poem DT, Congratulations.....
A   Avatar
May 1, 2016 at 5:56 PM
Daniel,, Congratulations on your castle on a hill win... love Linda
Rycroft Avatar
May 1, 2016 at 3:58 AM
Good poem would never of thought about sand castles well done xxx
Makama Avatar
April 30, 2016 at 2:31 PM
Its been a while I visited.. I have also not been online for a while due to my work but I am back now and this piece is just the perfect start I need to come back home to my wonderful poetrysoup. This is amazing, beautiful and a high seven! Well done friend
Lane Avatar
April 27, 2016 at 1:58 PM
Loved your approach on a castle on a hill. Well done, Danny.
Devnath  Avatar
April 27, 2016 at 12:57 PM
Congrats on your great win with this beautiful poem my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
Scars Avatar
April 27, 2016 at 12:56 PM
DT, many congrats on your placement in the contest! :)-luloo
Haight Avatar
April 27, 2016 at 12:56 PM
Daniel, congratulations on your placement in the 'castles' contest. Love your imagery. We built many sandcastles of the years with little ones. Sandra
Negron Flores Avatar
April 27, 2016 at 12:39 PM
Congratulations Daniel on the placement of the contest.
Murray Avatar
April 24, 2016 at 5:30 PM
Good one.
Promise Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 3:43 PM
Beautiful write. Just witnessed this in Florida last week. Freezing cold when I left! Enjoyed your creativity and imagery.
Ashe Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 3:12 PM
This is a poem of vision on many levels-the building of it, the admiration of the work and the reality of a changing tide! The mind's eye sees this!
Onclaud Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 1:10 PM
anything designed by innocent, creative hands is an architectural wonder.. and so is this work. well done, daniel..huggs
Andresen Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 12:56 PM
- A lovely poem, Daniel - Many castles as masterpieces in sand - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Quigley Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 12:03 PM
Very nice! Good luck! Glad you're up to writing!
Smith Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 10:39 AM
Terrific story DT my friend. I really enjoyed it.
Pennell  Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 9:54 AM
good take on the theme good luck
Lane Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 9:52 AM
I'm glad to see that your pain is not obstructing your creativeness. This is a good one, Danny.
Scars Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 9:31 AM
DT...love this..very well written...:)-luloo
White Avatar
April 20, 2016 at 9:09 AM
I miss kids' days of summer my dear friend. Thanks for the bring back Daniel
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