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Castle In My Mind

In this castle
Created in my mind
A tree,
This tree
A scar
A jagged one 
Still healing
Blood dripping
Forms a path

Two watchmen
Chipping away
Away at it's skin
Creating holes
To suck out blood
Warning others 
To follow the path

The path
A constant path
Almost invisible 
Leaves an endless highway
That will not be seen
From 

Far away

it forms a thin
Long and Knotted trail
Small black dots
On this pathway
Twisting and turning 
Around the tree
In this castle
Created in my mind

None have wondered
Where this path goes
They follow the crowd
The sounds
Constant sounds
Almost silent
Leave prints
That will be heard 

Far away 


Calluses, Sores, and scabs 
Created 
From the non-stop endless migration
The rhythmic pecks
The perpetual stomps
Of these creatures
in my mind

Forever 
Endless
As it seems
When will one 
break through it's sea

The truth 
An unknown truth
Can be turned into 
Lies
The destination unknown
Cannot be reached 
As it is
So

Far away

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 4/29/2017 8:20:00 PM
Aidan yes some destinations are faraway. Some are not, even so this is a great poem. A 7
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Aidan Dufaux
Date: 5/4/2017 1:51:00 PM
Thank you Darlene!
Date: 4/18/2017 9:36:00 AM
Love the imagery, so the tree is the narrator am I correct?
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Aidan Dufaux
Date: 4/18/2017 11:13:00 AM
Yes, that is correct. The beginning is from my perspective but then it switches to the tree. Thank you for noticing!
Date: 4/18/2017 8:56:00 AM
Beautiful thoughts and imagine
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Aidan Dufaux
Date: 4/18/2017 11:13:00 AM
Thank you!
Date: 4/9/2017 6:50:00 PM
I'm not sure if you should get in - or get out of - that castle. An intriguing write Aidan. thanks for entering the contest
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Date: 4/4/2017 3:03:00 AM
This is good and very meaningful in the description of the castles. The destination may remain unknown, but paradoxically it can be reached, after a long journey. Keep feeling and keep writing. Kai
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Date: 4/3/2017 6:28:00 AM
Enjoyed being in the castle for a while ... sorry, could not longer stay ... though the castle had more to say ...
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