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Castle In My Mind

In this castle Created in my mind A tree, This tree A scar A jagged one Still healing Blood dripping Forms a path Two watchmen Chipping away Away at it's skin Creating holes To suck out blood Warning others To follow the path The path A constant path Almost invisible Leaves an endless highway That will not be seen From Far away it forms a thin Long and Knotted trail Small black dots On this pathway Twisting and turning Around the tree In this castle Created in my mind None have wondered Where this path goes They follow the crowd The sounds Constant sounds Almost silent Leave prints That will be heard Far away Calluses, Sores, and scabs Created From the non-stop endless migration The rhythmic pecks The perpetual stomps Of these creatures in my mind Forever Endless As it seems When will one break through it's sea The truth An unknown truth Can be turned into Lies The destination unknown Cannot be reached As it is So Far away

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Date: 4/29/2017 8:20:00 PM
Aidan yes some destinations are faraway. Some are not, even so this is a great poem. A 7
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Aidan Dufaux
Date: 5/4/2017 1:51:00 PM
Thank you Darlene!
Date: 4/18/2017 9:36:00 AM
Love the imagery, so the tree is the narrator am I correct?
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Aidan Dufaux
Date: 4/18/2017 11:13:00 AM
Yes, that is correct. The beginning is from my perspective but then it switches to the tree. Thank you for noticing!
Date: 4/18/2017 8:56:00 AM
Beautiful thoughts and imagine
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Aidan Dufaux
Date: 4/18/2017 11:13:00 AM
Thank you!
Date: 4/9/2017 6:50:00 PM
I'm not sure if you should get in - or get out of - that castle. An intriguing write Aidan. thanks for entering the contest
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Date: 4/4/2017 3:03:00 AM
This is good and very meaningful in the description of the castles. The destination may remain unknown, but paradoxically it can be reached, after a long journey. Keep feeling and keep writing. Kai
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Date: 4/3/2017 6:28:00 AM
Enjoyed being in the castle for a while ... sorry, could not longer stay ... though the castle had more to say ...
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