Caryl Muzzey Poet Shadorma

Carnival Night

Colored lights
radiated dull
skies’ darkness;
Laughter mounts,
organ pipe resounds joyous,
drawing in more crowds.

Scrambler whirls
head spins all around;
Tummy flops
bright lights fade
hot dog and soft drink escapes,
into waiting crowd….

Copyright © 2011 By Caryl S. Muzzey

Nineth Place Winner ~ "Share A Shadorma” Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Nette Onclaud
Sept. 14, 2011

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Carolyn Devonshire August 24, 2011 at 9:09 PM Great description of the carnival, Caryl. Congratulations on your win! Love, Carolyn

John Freeman August 23, 2011 at 10:41 PM Congratulations Caryl on a worthy present for the contest. Agape, Moses

Andrea Dietrich August 23, 2011 at 10:03 PM this one did not deserve bottom spot. It's lovely, and you touched on the things I enjoy most about carnivals . Those rides! Love the creative way you expressed what happens in the last few lines!

Kash Poet August 23, 2011 at 2:18 PM Wonderful visuals here Caryl.Congrats on your win.

Jack Horne August 23, 2011 at 12:27 PM I haven't been on Soup for a day or so and have just seen all the contest results I've missed! Please excuse this quick message of congratulations - well done on all your wins : )

Caryl Ramsdale August 23, 2011 at 12:17 PM Congratulations on your winning placement in nette's Shadorma contest. Caryl Ramsdale

Carol Sunshine Brown August 23, 2011 at 10:16 AM Congratulations Caryl on your placement in Nette's "Share A Shadorma" contest. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 23, 2011 at 9:35 AM Congrats Caryl on your terrific win with these elegant lines on carnival my friend.. super one..luv..

Dr.Ram Mehta August 23, 2011 at 9:23 AM Congratulations on the win in the contest of nette,Caryl

David Williams August 23, 2011 at 4:17 AM hey Caryl congrats on your win, david

Carolyn Devonshire August 18, 2011 at 12:09 AM I can remember those fun nights at the local carnivals, Caryl, and you brought back a lot of great memories. Best wishes in Nette's contest. Soup mail. Love, Carolyn

Carrie Richards August 17, 2011 at 9:07 PM Oh dear!!! I'm afraid this happens more often than not!! Clever poem....this is so funny (as long as I'm not in the waiting crowd!!!)

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 17, 2011 at 6:45 PM sounds like super fun Caryl.. a treat for the whole family luv.. great visuals ..good luck in the contest..luv..

Joyce Johnson August 17, 2011 at 2:22 PM Great poem you entered also Caryl. Thanks for your nice comments on mine. I am sending a soup mail. Love, Joyce

Carol Sunshine Brown August 17, 2011 at 2:12 PM Thank you Caryl for sharing your creative poetry with us. I will be back another time to read more. Love, Carol

Doris Culverhouse August 17, 2011 at 1:55 PM wonderful write....reminds me of youth!!