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Car Trouble

My front end needs alignment and my rear end sags a lot
My vinyl seats get cold in fall; in summer they're too hot
Beneath the seats; old french fries, pennies, napkins, Laura Scudders
My fuel intake is kind of rough, sometimes it coughs and sputters
My lights are growing dimmer and my gas tank's sprung a leak
My steering wheel's bent out of shape; my windshield wipers squeek
My engine's losing power and my tires have lost their tread
My spark plugs all have lost their fire, my radio's gone dead.
My axle's looking fractured, and my frame is rusting through
My paint job's getting faded and my brakes are fading too
My oil is getting grungy, my speedometer flat-lined
My A/C blows warm air and my transmission tends to grind

This car of which I speak is ME (in case you didn't know)
It's running rough, but still it gets me where I need to go
These classic wheels still get around - they just move r e a l l y  s l o w!


written 31 Oct 2021
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Tor Avatar
July 25, 2022 at 2:21 AM
John time to trade yourself in for something a little less problematic. LOL. I am sure I have driven something similar to how you are feeling. You sound like you have had some winners John you sure know about car problems... Thank you for posting. Another smile at 5:15 in the morning. Enjoying your lovely Poetry this morning. God bless you and keep on writing...
Roper Avatar
November 7, 2021 at 7:32 PM
Great metaphor , John, we as cars start breaking down, but we might last till our 100s good mental mind and still moving like some of my family did..
Watt Avatar
July 25, 2022 at 7:58 AM
That's encouraging to know you have some good longevity genes, Eve. I do too. I guess we'd better keep our cars in good running order! Thanks for the comment. Hugs ~ John
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November 3, 2021 at 4:05 PM
Oh wow... what a original, a true gem. I love love love it!!! Awesome write! God bless you - Love, Gina
Watt Avatar
November 4, 2021 at 11:17 PM
So happy this appealed to you, dear Gina, and thank you for taking time to bless me with your enthusiastic comment. Blessings to you ~ John
Proxenos Avatar
November 3, 2021 at 10:24 AM
Hi John,laughed all the way with this clever rhyming poem about your car - rather be sensible and slow than in trouble with an expensive car and dough! I loved this poem, and your sense of humor rocks dear friend! Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
Watt Avatar
November 4, 2021 at 5:30 PM
Jenn, I love knowing I can bring a laugh or two with my words. Thank you ever so much for your constant friendship and support, as well as for your tremendous writing. Blessings and hugs ~ John
Wolf Avatar
November 2, 2021 at 6:35 PM
Aw, your gears may grind, but are your lights going blind?! ~ This is great fun, John. Cute as the black button on a kitten's nose. Excelsior! ~ Gershon
Wolf Avatar
November 10, 2021 at 3:12 PM
Unfortunately, since my car is pier-less, I simply couldn't complete that long drive, John. lol. ~ Peerless to some; not so much to others
Watt Avatar
November 4, 2021 at 5:29 PM
Thanks for taking a long drive off a short pier with me, my witty friend. Shalom ~ John
Jayasankar Avatar
November 2, 2021 at 9:59 AM
Haha...made me smile John...So cleverly penned with nice rhymes...Have a blessed day...God bless...~ Ani
Watt Avatar
November 4, 2021 at 10:23 AM
Thank you Ani, glad this could bring you a smile. Enjoy your day ~ John
Allison Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 1:42 PM
absolutely hilarious, I recall I did a poem on a similar theme about my hubby lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Watt Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 5:13 PM
Thanks Jan. Let me know the title, I would love to read it! Hugs ~ John
Dietrich Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 1:28 PM
I kind of thought you were maybe gonna make it personification. So good to see you here showing poems, John
Watt Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 5:14 PM
It's not easy surprising a seasoned pro such as yourself, haha. Thanks and take care.
Bauer Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 12:47 PM
i think many old clunkers on this site can relate very well to this one, john! very cleverly done and beautifully rhymed...
Watt Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 5:07 PM
ilene, here's to many more outings in the old jalopy!
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November 1, 2021 at 9:46 AM
Really, really enjoyable read and so relatable to us older dudes, John. Thanks so much for sharing. I loved your rhymes and it flowed very nicely.
Watt Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 5:08 PM
Hopefully we still have a lot of miles left on our tread. Thanks for the great comment Milton.
Ball Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 5:49 AM
lol This is great John. I have more than a few miles on my old ticker too but it's in pretty good shape although the gas tank could use some fixing. Loved this and your great sense of humor. God Bless, JB
Watt Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 5:06 PM
Thanks Judy. I imagine quite a few of us can relate.
Lawless Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 5:09 AM
Well, at least the old metaphoric motor is still purring John
Watt Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 5:05 PM
Vroom!
Cunningham Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 12:37 AM
Hilarious John, you're not alone though, we've all got plenty miles on the clock. Shame we can't trade ourselves in for a new model. Tom
Watt Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 12:41 AM
Ha ha, so true. But these classics have their own charms. Thanks for sharing the ride, my friend
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