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Captured

He left
That night locking
Her away with a kiss;
Her soul captured by his spirit,
She stayed.

She waits -
For the spirit
To light her pitch-black days;
To breathe into her missing nights;
She’s still.

maria.corado

12/14/14

Traditional style cinquain: syllable count: 2/4/6/8/2
for the Cinquain Contest of Dr.Ram Mehta (theme: Longing)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 2/25/2015 11:56:00 PM
Hello my crazy beautiful friend. Dropped by and saw this poignant piece. Such deep longing for the beloved displayed yet there's stillness, an indication of deep trust. Awesome 7! Crazy lovely hugs and smiles. :D
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Date: 3/3/2015 3:45:00 AM
thank you for dropping by, crazy lovely Kim! i have been caught up with things but it is a delight to come back and find you her and a 7 from you! wow! ain't i crazy blessed! i love what you said about trust, it is true! love and light! :))
Date: 1/8/2015 5:54:00 AM
Great poem. You leave us in suspension, as though waiting along with her.
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Date: 1/27/2015 4:53:00 AM
thanks, Scott!
Date: 12/28/2014 10:54:00 AM
really love how you painted this hija i pray you had a beautiful christmas wishing you a happy new year dear friend
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hija de la luna
Date: 1/1/2015 8:25:00 AM
thanks, Liam! Merry Christmas and happy new year!
Date: 12/14/2014 9:42:00 PM
Very beautiful and captured my imagination!
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Date: 12/15/2014 4:55:00 AM
thank you, laura, for the visit and your sweet words :))
Date: 12/14/2014 9:52:00 AM
What a beautiful piece filled with longing and love. Very romantic, indeed. To breath into her missing nights...how deep. Good luck in the contest.
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hija de la luna
Date: 12/14/2014 7:08:00 PM
thank you, Eileen, for the beautiful words. i appreciate it : ) God bless you!
Date: 12/13/2014 11:41:00 PM
Hija.. Wow, this draws me in emotionally. I'm wanting him to get back for her or I'm coming myself!
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hija de la luna
Date: 12/19/2014 4:32:00 AM
haha not yet :))
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Date: 12/14/2014 9:16:00 PM
Has he come yet.. I'm Getting restless ;)
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hija de la luna
Date: 12/13/2014 11:49:00 PM
:)) yea, she is waiting...thanks for the visit L.M. glad this moved you
Date: 12/13/2014 11:35:00 PM
Excellent cinquain, Hija! So sad when the longing is for lost love...hugs, Rhonda
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hija de la luna
Date: 12/13/2014 11:39:00 PM
thank you, Rhonda, for the visit and the lovely words. sadly, this happens, eh :)) hugs, maria
Date: 12/13/2014 9:56:00 PM
Wow "Her away with a kiss; Her soul captured by his spirit," thats such a powerful line, great poem!!!
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hija de la luna
Date: 12/13/2014 11:26:00 PM
thank you, arthur, for a wonderful comment! God bless~