Hija De La Luna Poet Cinquain

Captured

He left
That night locking
Her away with a kiss;
Her soul captured by his spirit,
She stayed.

She waits -
For the spirit
To light her pitch-black days;
To breathe into her missing nights;
She’s still.

maria.corado

12/14/14

Traditional style cinquain: syllable count: 2/4/6/8/2
for the Cinquain Contest of Dr.Ram Mehta (theme: Longing)

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Kp Nunez February 25, 2015 at 11:56 PM Hello my crazy beautiful friend. Dropped by and saw this poignant piece. Such deep longing for the beloved displayed yet there's stillness, an indication of deep trust. Awesome 7! Crazy lovely hugs and smiles. :D Hija De La Luna March 3, 2015 at 3:45 AM thank you for dropping by, crazy lovely Kim! i have been caught up with things but it is a delight to come back and find you her and a 7 from you! wow! ain't i crazy blessed! i love what you said about trust, it is true! love and light! :))

Scott Thirtyseven January 8, 2015 at 5:54 AM Great poem. You leave us in suspension, as though waiting along with her. Hija De La Luna January 27, 2015 at 4:53 AM thanks, Scott!

Liam Mcdaid December 28, 2014 at 10:54 AM really love how you painted this hija i pray you had a beautiful christmas wishing you a happy new year dear friend Hija De La Luna January 1, 2015 at 8:25 AM thanks, Liam! Merry Christmas and happy new year!

Laura Leiser December 14, 2014 at 9:42 PM Very beautiful and captured my imagination! Hija De La Luna December 15, 2014 at 4:55 AM thank you, laura, for the visit and your sweet words :))

Eileen Manassian December 14, 2014 at 9:52 AM What a beautiful piece filled with longing and love. Very romantic, indeed. To breath into her missing nights...how deep. Good luck in the contest. Hija De La Luna December 14, 2014 at 7:08 PM thank you, Eileen, for the beautiful words. i appreciate it : ) God bless you!

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders December 13, 2014 at 11:35 PM Excellent cinquain, Hija! So sad when the longing is for lost love...hugs, Rhonda Hija De La Luna December 13, 2014 at 11:39 PM thank you, Rhonda, for the visit and the lovely words. sadly, this happens, eh :)) hugs, maria

Arthur Vaso December 13, 2014 at 9:56 PM Wow "Her away with a kiss; Her soul captured by his spirit," thats such a powerful line, great poem!!! Hija De La Luna December 13, 2014 at 11:26 PM thank you, arthur, for a wonderful comment! God bless~