Captain's Log

Rescue parties in despair,
Spot his schooner drifting there
In the coming fog.
Someone heard him shoot a flare;
Naught remains, no hide nor hair,
Of the old seadog.
Fear is etched into the air,
Frantic scribblings make them stare
At his final log:

“Miles from any port or quay,
Sailing on the glassy sea,
I observe this morn
Something taller than a tree -
Wonder what the thing can be!
Suddenly forlorn,
Sweating madly as I see
More than one - in fact ‘tis three -
Massive beasts unshorn.

“Staring at the dreadful sight,
Chest is feeling mighty tight,
Standing on the deck.
Fearsome creatures; will they bite?
Gulping at their awful height,
Watch one crane its neck -
Scary, though ‘tis full daylight.
Will not stand a chance to fight -
Think they plan to wreck…”

For David’s Virelai contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 6/25/2012 9:53:00 AM
you always find exactly the right picture to enhance your poetry, jack.. another winning piece!..) hugggs!
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Date: 6/24/2012 6:02:00 PM
Jack, you are a WONDER with the challenge of new poetry forms. The only thing that will keep a gem like this from the top of the list perhaps is the fact you did not do a romantic one like David told us he liked!!
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Date: 6/24/2012 5:03:00 PM
awesome Jack.. a true seafaring tale in rhyme so grand luv.. best wishes.. a winning work of art.. so far..nothing to report on our dear heart poetess..luv.. I am concerned so..
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Date: 6/24/2012 4:18:00 PM
Captain's Star Date June 24, 2030...ha ha ha..You always were good at this space stuff and this has to be a great outlet for your theme...nah, I don't think those creatures will bite.....Soup Mail, Jack.
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Date: 6/24/2012 2:13:00 PM
Winning material for sure..Good luck in the contest..Scary, scary....My chest would be tight in this circumstance..I wouldn't make a good seadog..Sara
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Date: 6/24/2012 12:59:00 PM
Hey Jack pl.check the rhyme scheme carefully:)
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Date: 6/24/2012 12:26:00 PM
Nice story, suspense, flow... Good luck in the contest... If luck isn't required, your poem will do well! Terry
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Date: 6/24/2012 12:17:00 PM
This is one of my favorite poems I've ever read! The mystery behind the story and the attention to detail with the incredible lure to stay entranced within the write is tremendous! You've done masterfully with this poem my friend! I've really enjoyed this write! Great Work!!
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Date: 6/24/2012 11:41:00 AM
Jack, good luck in contest this is a win poem. - well done - oxox hug Anne-Lise
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Date: 6/24/2012 11:19:00 AM
Enteraining poem i like this. The poem has a very good flow and rythm.
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