Can'T Take Any More

How much longer can this go on?
How much more do I have to take?
One foot in front the other
with never a pause or break.

Relentlessly this pain does grind
I'm weary to the core
I no longer have the strength
to battle one day more.

I know you'd say to not give up
that I should keep on trying
But it's so hard to carry on
when inside you're slowly dying.

So let me just throw in the towel
and for one last time I'll weep
then let my cares just drift away
while I forever sleep.


Emote Contest. Depression.
H/M

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 7/8/2011 6:29:00 PM
WoW! So much pain here. Really good imagery. Lots of emotion. Very well done though so sad. God Bless, JB
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Date: 6/27/2011 7:40:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Debbie's "Emote" contest Emma. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/22/2011 8:19:00 PM
I definitely got emotion that you were trying to convey here, Emma! I think we all feel that way sometimes, the bliss of forever sleep---Way to go for being among the winners :D
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Date: 6/22/2011 4:19:00 PM
I think you did a first class of displaying the emotion. congratulations Emma. Love, Joyce
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Date: 6/22/2011 4:03:00 PM
I could definitely feel the depression in your poem, Emma. Very nicely done. Congratulations on your success in Deb's contest! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 6/22/2011 3:51:00 PM
Congrats Emma on your HM in the contest Emote luv.. with this wonderful entry so beautiful.. enjoy special honor..
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Date: 6/22/2011 3:15:00 PM
Congrad's on your win. I too suffer with this and all I can say is it does feel this bad sometimes way worse..my input would be to show..what does slowly dying feel like? Thanks so much for your entry! Light & Love
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Date: 6/21/2011 2:53:00 PM
Right on target with your description of depression, Emma. People can tell you to keep going, but when you're seriously depressed, it's hard to find the energy. All you do is cry and sleep. Awesome entry for Deb's contest. Wishing you success! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 6/21/2011 8:12:00 AM
abuse of any kind is always wrong Emma and u did a fantastic job conveying that emotion luv.. good luck in the contest.. a thought provoking write luv..
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Date: 6/21/2011 4:37:00 AM
This is a very good write, it conveys the emotion with out getting bogged down in it. My advice would be to look at the winners of this contest when it finishes, work out which words may you feel, which ones really fit the emotion being described - Good luck
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