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Candy Coated Wreck

Paperless dolls and run-less runs – Roller coaster rides and fun-less fun. Hopscotch and blisters; banana-seat bikes – Hand games and shout-backs too. Quiet-less walks at 3:00 in the morn – Virtual stranger rides with indecency. Cracker-jacks and white wine spritzers – Early morning-midnight bizarre. Hellish targets for our holy aims – Lipsticks red and perfumes sweet. Mustard corndogs with licorice malt – Chocolate mustache with milk beards. Sunstroke and fallacy whipping tales – Tongue-tied talk and all the such. Hair-unwoven nightmares & bobby pins – Lurid washed-out make-up; oh the horror. Candy-less sugar pops dressed in green – Wrappers prettied up in dazzling clash. Malt whiskey and bourbon please – Ante up for your hill-less ride.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 9/20/2009 7:07:00 AM
Congratulations on your lovely poetry being featured this week>>James
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Date: 9/19/2009 2:08:00 PM
Good use of imagery for a creative perspective. Congratulations on having your poem featured. I wish you ongoing success with your writing. Karen
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Date: 9/15/2009 8:17:00 PM
Deborah - Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week – God Bless, MJ
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Date: 9/15/2009 1:32:00 AM
Deborah, congrats on having your work featured...Raul
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Date: 9/14/2009 4:30:00 PM
Sad way to live. Good use of imagery to convey your thoughts. Congratulations on having your poem featured, Enjoy your honor. Keep on writing! Karen
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Date: 9/14/2009 3:48:00 PM
nicely done, congrats on being a featured artist!!
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Date: 9/14/2009 4:01:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured this week Deborah. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/14/2009 12:23:00 AM
Congrats on your featured poem this week Deborah.Rgds Brian
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Date: 5/12/2009 6:26:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry making it into the semi finals Deb. Wishing you the best of luck in the finals. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/3/2009 9:58:00 PM
Deborah, my belated congrats in making the semi finals...Raul
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Date: 3/31/2009 9:51:00 PM
nice one!
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Date: 10/3/2008 3:28:00 PM
Flowed like a song here, Deborah and had a 1930's feel of another time long gone ... beautifully done. Its been July since you've been here at the Soup. Hope you come back with lots more writes!!
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Date: 8/4/2008 8:11:00 PM
enjoyed reading this piece of fine poetry.
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Date: 7/6/2008 2:08:00 PM
Wowzy, soul-sister. That was amazing. You have a true talent in the art of expression, and your flow was immaculate. Sure sounds like you had fun, and I will definitely hope to ante up for that ride. Thanks for your encouraging comment on my wild journey through life. lol Peace, Ivy
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Date: 7/5/2008 4:36:00 AM
A mixture of the good and bad but I'd still re-do it again instead of this time of Cents-less dollars and truthful lies. God Bless. Vince
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