Candy Coated Wreck

Paperless dolls and run-less runs –
Roller coaster rides and fun-less fun.
Hopscotch and blisters; banana-seat bikes –
Hand games and shout-backs too.

Quiet-less walks at 3:00 in the morn –
Virtual stranger rides with indecency.
Cracker-jacks and white wine spritzers –
Early morning-midnight bizarre.

Hellish targets for our holy aims –
Lipsticks red and perfumes sweet.
Mustard corndogs with licorice malt –
Chocolate mustache with milk beards.

Sunstroke and fallacy whipping tales –
Tongue-tied talk and all the such.
Hair-unwoven nightmares & bobby pins –
Lurid washed-out make-up; oh the horror.

Candy-less sugar pops dressed in green –
Wrappers prettied up in dazzling clash.
Malt whiskey and bourbon please –
Ante up for your hill-less ride.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

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September 20, 2009 at 7:07 AM
Congratulations on your lovely poetry being featured this week>>James
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September 19, 2009 at 2:08 PM
Good use of imagery for a creative perspective. Congratulations on having your poem featured. I wish you ongoing success with your writing. Karen
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September 15, 2009 at 8:17 PM
Deborah - Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week – God Bless, MJ
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September 15, 2009 at 1:32 AM
Deborah, congrats on having your work featured...Raul
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September 14, 2009 at 4:30 PM
Sad way to live. Good use of imagery to convey your thoughts. Congratulations on having your poem featured, Enjoy your honor. Keep on writing! Karen
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September 14, 2009 at 3:48 PM
nicely done, congrats on being a featured artist!!
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September 14, 2009 at 4:01 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured this week Deborah. Love, Carol
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September 14, 2009 at 12:23 AM
Congrats on your featured poem this week Deborah.Rgds Brian
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May 12, 2009 at 6:26 AM
Congratulations on your poetry making it into the semi finals Deb. Wishing you the best of luck in the finals. Love, Carol
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May 3, 2009 at 9:58 PM
Deborah, my belated congrats in making the semi finals...Raul
Ahmad Avatar
March 31, 2009 at 9:51 PM
nice one!
Mason Avatar
October 3, 2008 at 3:28 PM
Flowed like a song here, Deborah and had a 1930's feel of another time long gone ... beautifully done. Its been July since you've been here at the Soup. Hope you come back with lots more writes!!
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August 4, 2008 at 8:11 PM
enjoyed reading this piece of fine poetry.
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July 6, 2008 at 2:08 PM
Wowzy, soul-sister. That was amazing. You have a true talent in the art of expression, and your flow was immaculate. Sure sounds like you had fun, and I will definitely hope to ante up for that ride. Thanks for your encouraging comment on my wild journey through life. lol Peace, Ivy
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July 5, 2008 at 4:36 AM
A mixture of the good and bad but I'd still re-do it again instead of this time of Cents-less dollars and truthful lies. God Bless. Vince
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