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Can We Live In Harmony

You moved ever so gently over me a tempestuous wind stirring my senses. And I, always the nonchalant sea, lost the ability to flow in normalcy We were two impetuous forms of nature. Could we ever learn to live in harmony? You blew across my tranquil waters spilling my treasures upon the shore. Then your breath was stilled... I felt the force of your presence no more. No moon had ever governed my tides the way your winds brushed my soul. I'd never been so swept away, never had I given up full control. My waters ebbed in the wrong direction and there was no peace upon my waves. Is this what happens to ill-fated lovers when their hearts bleed in watery graves?

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/14/2022 11:57:00 PM

I absolutely loved this incredible poem Lin. The depth of metaphors within your lines left me breathless. Straight into my Faves! I wish I could write like this my friend. Outstanding! Blessings xxoo

Lin Lane
Date: 1/15/2022 8:46:00 AM

Hi Connie. Thank you so very much for liking my lines to give me such awesome feedback and faving it. I hope you're well. Have a great weekend.

Mark Koplin

Date: 1/14/2022 3:19:00 PM

It’s so sad when this happens, powerful words my friend!

Lin Lane
Date: 1/15/2022 8:45:00 AM

Thanks a lot for your response, Mark.

Mike Gentile

Date: 1/13/2022 11:13:00 AM

No moon had ever governed my tides! Love that line Lin! Great metaphor throughout!!

Lin Lane
Date: 1/13/2022 6:39:00 PM

Thanks, Mike. I appreciate that you let me know a partlcular line you liked.

Chris Green

Date: 1/12/2022 2:26:00 PM

Wow, this was so beautifully deep and almost intoxicating. I found myself lost within your words today. Wonderful imagery that washes over the reader softly but leaves an ache in its wake.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/12/2022 4:41:00 PM

Hi Chris. Nice to see you again and to read your comments that are as poetic as ever. Thanks so much.

Ilene Bauer

Date: 1/12/2022 11:45:00 AM

this is very beautiful, lin!

Lin Lane
Date: 1/12/2022 4:40:00 PM

Thanks ever so much, Ilene.

L Milton Hankins

Date: 1/12/2022 11:33:00 AM

Beautifully written, Lin. I enjoyed each stanza immensely. I do suspect this is what happens to "ill-fated lovers." OTOH, true love can be allowed to wane and die.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/12/2022 4:40:00 PM

Thank you so much, Milt. The sea and the wing, moon and sun...not so much different from a man and a woman when love fades.