Camille

She was out there in the dark
A brooding, angry monster
She attacked, screaming in fury
Wind gauges flattened and futile
She came to purge, to cleanse...

*Wind speed estimated at 230 MPH 
Sumitted for: Black Eyed Susan's contest

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Elaine George

May 30, 2014 at 4:30 AM

This blows me away. lol....... Gppd one, Tim. Lainie

Monterey Sirak

April 17, 2014 at 7:17 AM

Wonderful descriptions! I went through one hurricane and that was enough for me!

Jan Allison

April 14, 2014 at 2:40 PM

Incredible imagery of something I have only ever seen on TV (thankfully) hugs Jan xx

Cyndi Macmillan

April 14, 2014 at 9:28 AM

Good last line, but I think the second line would work better with just brooding. It is a strong enough adjective. Another idea is to use brood in the first line, which would make it stronger. She broods in the dark. Screaming in fury is a bit cliché. Now, purge? Purge I liked. Hope you had a good weekend. Read your blog. Chose not to leave a comment on it. Soup mail :) Re: Hopelessness. Cheers Cyndi

Debbie Guzzi

April 13, 2014 at 8:33 PM

Ok here you go not narrative, verse or free verse - ask yourself how is this any different from any other description of a hurricane? [ Deb's ducking the tomato!] ;) Light & Love Cher

Tim Ryerson

April 13, 2014 at 9:09 PM

AND, I owe you some comments too...Phony blog huh?

Tim Ryerson

April 13, 2014 at 9:08 PM

So what is the form then Deb? Blank verse? (No need to duck cause my aim is VERY bad)Thanks for the blog comment...

Lucilla Carrillo

April 13, 2014 at 9:21 AM

This is good Tim. I have only been in one, that was Rita. It was a mess after it was over. We had no power for 8 days, some people for more. Thanks for sharing. Sorry about the entry. Luclla

Andrea Dietrich

April 8, 2014 at 1:14 AM

gosh this one did not place?? What a shame . I think you did a great job with it. A mentor, huh?? Just tell me what you want to know, my friend. I was three days gone from here except to do a bit of blogging yesterday. just now I caught up after being here two hours!! Ahhhh, sweet relief.

Debbie Guzzi

April 4, 2014 at 3:14 PM

Hurricane yes? Did they ever name them after men at all? I think we have a lot of rough weather coming. Light & Love

Tim Ryerson

April 4, 2014 at 3:31 PM

Yes they did Deb...The first was Hurricane Fredrick who I had the misfortune of meeting in person. He was not a very friendly fella and seemed to be in a VERY bad mood...