Camille

She was out there in the dark A brooding, angry monster She attacked, screaming in fury Wind gauges flattened and futile She came to purge, to cleanse... *Wind speed estimated at 230 MPH Sumitted for: Black Eyed Susan's contest

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Elaine George

Date: 5/30/2014 4:30:00 AM

This blows me away. lol....... Gppd one, Tim. Lainie

Monterey Sirak

Date: 4/17/2014 7:17:00 AM

Wonderful descriptions! I went through one hurricane and that was enough for me!

Jan Allison

Date: 4/14/2014 2:40:00 PM

Incredible imagery of something I have only ever seen on TV (thankfully) hugs Jan xx

Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 4/14/2014 9:28:00 AM

Good last line, but I think the second line would work better with just brooding. It is a strong enough adjective. Another idea is to use brood in the first line, which would make it stronger. She broods in the dark. Screaming in fury is a bit cliché. Now, purge? Purge I liked. Hope you had a good weekend. Read your blog. Chose not to leave a comment on it. Soup mail :) Re: Hopelessness. Cheers Cyndi

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/13/2014 8:33:00 PM

Ok here you go not narrative, verse or free verse - ask yourself how is this any different from any other description of a hurricane? [ Deb's ducking the tomato!] ;) Light & Love Cher

Tim Ryerson
Date: 4/13/2014 9:09:00 PM

AND, I owe you some comments too...Phony blog huh?

Tim Ryerson
Date: 4/13/2014 9:08:00 PM

So what is the form then Deb? Blank verse? (No need to duck cause my aim is VERY bad)Thanks for the blog comment...

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 4/13/2014 9:21:00 AM

This is good Tim. I have only been in one, that was Rita. It was a mess after it was over. We had no power for 8 days, some people for more. Thanks for sharing. Sorry about the entry. Luclla

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/8/2014 1:14:00 AM

gosh this one did not place?? What a shame . I think you did a great job with it. A mentor, huh?? Just tell me what you want to know, my friend. I was three days gone from here except to do a bit of blogging yesterday. just now I caught up after being here two hours!! Ahhhh, sweet relief.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/4/2014 3:14:00 PM

Hurricane yes? Did they ever name them after men at all? I think we have a lot of rough weather coming. Light & Love

Tim Ryerson
Date: 4/4/2014 3:31:00 PM

Yes they did Deb...The first was Hurricane Fredrick who I had the misfortune of meeting in person. He was not a very friendly fella and seemed to be in a VERY bad mood...

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/1/2014 7:22:00 AM

... Glad it was not me ... :) --- well done Tim! - I wish you a nice day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)