Just That Archaic Poet Poet Rhyme

Call Me Monday When I'Ve Made My Millions

How true it is- it's you I miss, 
Deep inside my Heart's bare core 
Oblige me, please, with one more kiss-
Oh, my Love- this I implore!
Of you I dream the sweetest dreams, 
That in my arms you hither lie 
When I awake, and seen what I've seen, 
By my own guilt I wish to die!

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Scott Thirtyseven November 18, 2013 at 3:28 AM The title is a knockout, but I'm not exactly sure how it relates to the text? Loved it though. Does the protagonist really want one last kiss? No! Never! Guilty bugger wants redemption. Or so I say. Just That Archaic Poet November 18, 2013 at 5:31 AM Thanks for the read and reply, Scott. They title and body are meant to be purposely disparate, but the more I reflect on it, the title may have a deeper subconscious meaning than I initially recognized. I appreciate you stopping by :)

Carol Eastman November 2, 2013 at 1:56 PM Your work is quite unique... in a fun way! Just That Archaic Poet November 2, 2013 at 2:07 PM Thanks again, Carol; much appreciated :)

Poet. Undertaker November 1, 2013 at 9:00 PM "just "!my blog no place to vent your depression. (: ) Jenish. Just That Archaic Poet November 2, 2013 at 8:08 AM I wasn't aware I was venting "depression"; I was aware that I was expressing an opinion, which had nothing to do with depression whatsoever. I think something got lost in translation, Jenish.

Richard Lamoureux November 1, 2013 at 9:52 AM Thanks for the explanation, I ponder no more. I like all the thought and comments you provoked. Just That Archaic Poet November 1, 2013 at 10:14 AM Thanks, Richard. I'm always delighted when you stop by. Thanks for the review, my friend :)

Charmaine Chircop October 30, 2013 at 5:56 PM Intriguing post..Its as if someone is in love yet lost his love..the one whom He dreams about through lack of money which makes it impossible to be with his love..Pondering!!! Just That Archaic Poet October 31, 2013 at 8:44 AM Thanks for the review, Charm :)

Robin Davis October 30, 2013 at 5:29 PM Chan my friend This is an intriguing and interesting write. The reader has to wonder what is going on and what you saw that made you feel like this. Nice job Thanks for the awesome comment on my Devilish Demons poem. Love and hugs Sweet pea Just That Archaic Poet October 31, 2013 at 8:45 AM Many thanks for the read and review Sweet Pea! :)

Joseph Matose October 30, 2013 at 12:15 PM Great LOVE poem, Archaic! Thanks for sharing. Friend, JM Just That Archaic Poet October 31, 2013 at 8:46 AM Thanks, JM :)

Honestly J.T. October 30, 2013 at 11:35 AM Soo are you saying you love both the money and the woman and the woman could love you for your money even though that may not be the case. Also its a good feeling when a man can provide. Just That Archaic Poet October 31, 2013 at 8:48 AM The title and poem and completely disparate; I think I did this for the purpose of ambiguity which seems to have backfired. Thanks for the review, PJ :)

Richard Lamoureux October 30, 2013 at 8:49 AM Here I ponder! Just That Archaic Poet October 30, 2013 at 9:01 AM Good; that's what I was hoping for. Thanks for the reviews, Richard :)

Sara Kendrick October 30, 2013 at 7:36 AM Interesting work work of a pinning love..I am left with a question at the end as to what you have seen..Thanks for the visit to my page..I liked that word lugubriosity also..Sara Just That Archaic Poet October 30, 2013 at 8:09 AM should say * I wanted the reader to ponder lol ;) Just That Archaic Poet October 30, 2013 at 8:08 AM I left that intentionally ambiguous and vague; I wanted the reader the ponder what it was I saw and decide for themselves. Thanks for the review, Sara :)